All Comments on 'It Ain't Paranoia if... Ch. 03'

Sex element WAY to over the top.

Prediction: The Ex is working for the Cartel.

Enjoying it again. Still 5 in my mind.

Building in excitement, well done. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Rolling along nicely. 5 from me.

One more sentence problem: "Sounds you have a pretty good handle on your... foibles

Oh, the sex scene was way to long, t detracts form the story.

You'd think they were in the Sandbox fighting the Taliban. Our MC is too trusting of his ex, everything he has been showing and sharing since she showed up with the kids. And now he's bopping her! Who knows?

On with the battle!

good story aside from the protagonist being a spineless cuck

Story isn't bad, but the cuck spin is nauseating, as they prepare to reap another ripple of her infidelity. ⭐⭐⭐

Good chapter!

5

Yes, an entertaining story well told. Still, she cheated, left him with the kids and moved in with her lover and after five years it only takes a few days, a naked body and he's fucking the slut again? That seems very silly to me!

Keep it coming. Good fun.

Enjoyable but a little hokey, meaning not believable.

Oh just fuck off

He can afford a 250 ft bridge but only has enough food for the planned crew size for a month? Seems like pretty poor planning. He did at least note his electronics might be vulnerable although a prudent man would have them all already hardened against EMP.

007 silly but great fun.

Brilliant, can hardly wait for the next chapter.

Great "JR" moment! Really a good story and you spin a yarn about as well as any I have read. Looking forward to the next installment. Thanks for sharing your fantasies and writing talent.

Cheers

SAGE

I really wish you would wait until you had the entire story written before you submit it. This constant waiting for the rest of the story sucks.

Great story.

Damn, this is exciting as hell. The suspense is killing me and I want to thank you for that wonderful sex scene, just picturing Kaitlyn In my mind was so hot.