by REGade
glad have sw mo hermit and a couple other non wimp authors
This guy is so stupid, he should not be allowed out without a leash.
still. the fact that the main character seems so fuzzy "up there", being so naive, showing poor judgement and wining over it rather than learning from his mistakes, takes away quite a bit from the reading experience. I just hope his learning curve will be more steep in the following chapters...
Read this story on another site and enjoyed it very much!Thanks.
I can't say I am crazy about this story, so far,but your "Telltale Signs" was one of the best stories I've read on this site, so I assume this will improve as you go on. Keep on writing.
60 year old George
It could be a very good tale but it's hard to tell since the chapters are so short. Please consider longer chapters.