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in all the best ways.

As one who does not, through some glitch that the admin cannot seem to resolve for me, post here, I considered how tough the challenge was and tried a couple of short vignettes. It is difficult to convey feelings and romance in such a small aperture, and this story was delightfully executed. Well done and deserving the five stars.

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Simply awesome, Todd.

I was blessed with a pre-post read of this. Todd is just the master, and this just shows that he doesn't need a big story to tell a great tale.

Hilariously romantic or romantically hilarious, I'm still trying to decide but very well written and yes it is outside of your usual fare. But, there is no denying that it is a todd story. Keep up the good word.... err! work. Enjoy

That was a very nice, romantic story!

Even limited to 750 words, you create an interesting story. Excessive verbiage can be the bane of the writer, although I have never complained about the length of your normal fare.

Short, Sweet, great ending. Five Stars, and thank you for it.

Love the story. Many of the Loving Wives 750's were disappointing, A bit to formula like. This story was different, just enough to get a feel for the characters. The moment and them finding each other. Thanks again.

A truly entertaining story even with the confining restrictions.

Too bad more Literotica authors don't understand that joys and benefits of brevity!

That’s an exquisitely good story to tell in only 750 words. *****

with all the memories included, TK U MLJ LV NV

Simply beautiful. Love.

AWESOME!!

AND in a bygone writing voice and style. I 'felt' something like the 40's in the tone and temperament, not being very good on early 20th century literary styles.

Not sure whom you were channeling, but for some reason, O. Henry (a former convict who wrote in prison) comes to mind.

I liked it and you wove the tale very well. I'd vote but then I'd be voting against myself. I will admit I think yours is better than mine.

Well Done again.

I loved this one as opposed to your the dark, dank "Cold". This had a light hearted, warm feel to it. I loved the pair of them. Well played. More like this.

5 stars

It didn't turn out as well, but it did turn into a relationship.

I very much enjoyed this short story. It was sweet and well told. My only disappointment was that it lacked much in eroticism, which I expect on Literotica.

Crisp warm narrative. Great job Todd🙃

Thanks Todd - Great writing as usual!

What a skill with words. This was truly a treasure to read.

Beautifully done

I realize that you’ve finished this story in exactly 750 words (I didn’t count them, but you did) but feel that the story’s brevity did not allow you the opportunity to more than begin to develop these characters. Normally you are able to infuse your subjects with “soul” but that is lacking in this exercise. I have often referred to you as a storyteller (one of the best, by the way) but this story is just that; a story. Please continue writing your typically longer tales! Thank you!

Very nice job. I find them to be believable and even better likable. As always you deliver...

You and other writers are positively amazing. 750 words and not a dull moment!

Very entertaining and ending with a large family!

Great short story.

“Doughy” - describing a young woman in one word. A great story, and very erotic despite being labelled a romance.

A very well done and worthwhile 750 words!

For those who want to throw their money at todd here is a comment that he put in a place where very few would read it.

We have novelized the first three Needles and Delaney stories into an ebook on Amazon, titled, originally enough as "Needles and Delaney." We did that partly because so many have asked us to, partly because it was just something new to do, and partly as to protect the work - there are people who skim sites for stories then publish them as ebooks under false names. Some of the real heavy hitters here have had that happen to them.

Doc Spirit 3

Interesting

I have No fond memories of trains . I did get lucky and did not have my suitcase stolen . My Cousin Jim had his suitcase stolen and never returned . He lost a new watch that he had bought for his wife . So much for their 35th anniversary .

Second (or maybe third - I forget) read, Just as good as I remembered. As usual with your work, 5 stars ain't enough. Please, if at all possible, keep writing on this site. You have relieved my boredom more times than I can remember. Vielen Dank. Merci beaucoup. And any other language you would care to imagine. LPW

A rather interesting and provocative story in so few words.

Very sweet story.

Read this again for the third or fourth time. Wish I could give it more stars!

I haven't ridden a train in years. They always seemed so rewarding, the swaying of the cars, clicking of the wheels and rush of the countryside going buy. Not sure it would be the same now days, it's just kind of lost it's magic. This is a nice little story that was a pleasure to read. Thanks

Lovely story

excellent even for the second time.....................

Love it

Six children??? This story should be in Erotic Horror, not Romance :=P :=P :=P Seriously, it's great to see this author's unquestionable talent turned into a short and sweet romance with a happy ending. Thank you!

Beautiful. It was nice and compact as well as romantic as hell. Different that your military episodes.

good story, told with some taste, not crude