All Comments on 'It Takes Two'

The last half of the story is all jumbled up! You've confused Nathan and Dillon, and nothing makes sense!

Interesting ideas, but seems really rushed.

yeah, sadly I realize this isn't my best work. The one I actually spent sometime on takes place in Russia, SO I figured now was not the time to publish it. Last time I set a story in the real world. Stupid! I suppose I just wanted this on the record. Last time I set something in the real world! :P

I agree you switch Nathan and Dillon, So the last half did not make sense!

I think setting the story in the real world was fine. I enjoyed it, and it was well-written. I think that you should have taken some more time to read it over to make sure you got the names right. I was left shaking my head and had to go back to check the names. It wouldn’t be too hard to change up Nathan and Dillon’s names at the end where they got mixed up.

Regardless, I enjoyed the story. Thank you for writing and thank you for sharing your work.

Very confusing! You mixed up your characters, I think.

Honestly, I don't see why this was in Humor and Satire, other than the name of the law firm. It wasn't funny how you got Valarie wrong, spelling it Valrarie, Valaire and then Valorie. Then you mixed up Dillon and Nathan. Plus, what did the story have to do with April Fool's? Nothing that I could see. 2 stars is being generous.

What a whirlwind of sex, loved it. It just sounds like a bunch of people who enjoy sex, right? But I think Kaylee deserved better than Dillon.