by yellowjacket66
Another false best friend! LW is full of this kind of stories! Nothing new in here.
This just needed a little work at the end to round it off. The sentence doesn’t finish at ‘reached’.
Well you have to finish the job, or are you saying she was sick over him??
I think it’s a good idea that needs a lot more thought to be taken seriously.
Boo! Hiss! You should be reported for leading people on! A story without an ending? I hope the mob finds justice when they find you! Shame on you!
She - cheating slut, disrespecting and cucking husband. He -cheating bastard, disrespecting and cucking his FORMER best friend. Not much of a story,; low quality writing, unlikeable characters, poor story line ... waste of time.
Others have commented that the ending seems unfinished. I agree. So I propose that the ending of "as she reached" (which makes no sense) be changed to "as she reached orgasm". It would still be a bad ending but would at least make sense.
The wife is a slut and " his best friend" is a creep and not a friend at all. Both betray the husband. The story needed more explanation for the betrayal besides it being a coupling of convenience. The brief mention of the pillow talk by the husband and wife about the friend hinted at a 'sharing' fantasy, but the husband being in a drunken coma eliminated sharing and made the story into a slut wife cheating when given the opportunity. Story is barely a *3*.