by Evil Alpaca
What can I say... you took some story elements that not many people can use effectively and produced one hell of a story. I can't wait for the next part :)
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You'd better keep this one going, I don't want to have to wait for long!
(You know about my thing for vampires ;))
too long to come up with the next chapter. Very exotic and fast paced. I'm enthralled with your character development. Maestro, play on!
I enjoyed reading this story and can't wait for the remaing chapters!
~Honey
Good story but needs some editing. About 3/4 down first page there is something wrong with the two nexts... Just a "to" left out maybe? Wordsearch for hear. A couple of places it should be here. Stylewise the __ next day __ makes it seem very comic bookish to me so unless that's what you were going for you might want to change it to just using a lead in sentence.I liked it and am trying to give useful feedback... But I suppose when I get around to it I should submit something of mine so others can pick it to pieces :) just to be fair
Wow! I enjoyed everything about this story. The characters, the setting(s), everything!
I'm just happy I didn't have to wait for the next five installments coz I'm reading them all right now. :)
A great idea, great characters, great action, great sex this story is a great thrill ride. Take it you will be entertained, and out of breath. So hot!!
Thank you evil alpaca for taking the time!!
That was the one feeling I got from everything: too rushed. The relationships, the story, the set-up... Rushed. A lovely writer like yourself does infinitely better when she takes her time.
Read some of your other stuff before, you do have a knack for spinning a good tale. Normally I tend to skim the sex scenes since it feels like a commercial during a movie, you just want it to get over and done with so you can continue with the story but here it seems to fit in nicely.
can't wait to see what other stories you will write.
clever plot, thrilling action, great characters, an awesome read. i read this story a couple of years ago and just decided to read it again. excellent!
You're like the James Cameron of writing porn. Tyvm for the entertainment.