All Comments on 'Jake & Skye'

Need to proofread better. Not sure why you would have two different names.

Only a few slips here and there (like the use of loader instead of louder, for example), you managed to make a good, non-cliched buildup. When you change your mind about the character name (I assume you wrote that paragraph before), just to be sure, use the "find/replace" option on your text editor. But overall, a very enjoyable read!

As a side note: I'm telling Skye to come and read this. Yeah.

Yeah, I do need to proofread better. Kate is in a different story I have in the works. Thanks for reading & commenting! I look forward to seeing what everyone has to say about it.

Skye became Kate and then went back to Skye again