All Comments on 'James' Story'

Good first story!

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Thanks for an interesting parade of female characters. You have had the courage to venture beyond the stock characters of Literotica fiction. You have a woman whose personality is "desperation", one whose vagina is gapingly slack, and a woman who is quiet while she orgasms. As a reader, my biggest problem with the story is the confusing uses of tenses - periodically, the story shifts for a sentence or two from the past tense to the present tense. Keep writing, and let comments be a guide to better and better stories, and not a put-down.

Great story everyone needs to find their significant other that they match sexually

Was good but needed more... Feeling? I felt like I was reading a shortened monologue of someones life. It was almost lifeless. Didn't really make me feel anything, that's what I love about stories most, the happiness with the good times, sadness/pity over James' struggles, excited at their passion. Idk it just didn't hit the mark for me, I couldn't bond with any of the characters