All Comments on 'Janet and Jake'

Great story. You gave away Jake, as the friend who got lucky with Janet, too early. You could have built more around the one of the two who constantly ogled Janet. Giving him a name, leaving hints that he may have got lucky with Janet years later, building tention at the reader. Like Janet's heart racing faster when she realized that he finds her desirable.

Loved it in spite of the above.

A little too quick from 0-60 in the beginning, the ending would have been better if you left it open, instead of just taping on a 'married somebody else' a year later. Either he had been with the other girl all along, or met her and married her in a very short period of time. Doesn't really make sense.

Sensual sexuality!

Good story

Ending sucked! Need to work on the storyline (length).

Loved the story, but it came to an abrupt ending. You could have explored their relationship through a few more chapters, perhaps told of their sexual lovemaking over the next months before Jake drifted away. The very mature and muscular Jake appears to have grown and developed considerably from what Janet remembers from his school days. Perhaps when he strips his shirt away, she can be blown away not only by his muscular tan chest but also by the sexy man chest hair that grows there. Good story for reading!

Nice story only wish there was the risk of her getting pregnant.