All Comments on 'Japan Ch. 01: Cumming to the Gym'

Nice and hot.

Just one small issue. You use western names on these two girls but you never say if they are Japanese, Caucasians or whatever. Should paint the picture better if you had.

Emerald eyes? So we’re any of the women in the story Japanese? Please describe their facial features so the reader can imagine them.

Concept is good. I could not get a good feel or connect with the characters. There is not enough details and development with them.