All Comments on 'Jeannie Jaye 01'

OK, so you almost get sexual with a male. This is pregress for Pink Purple.

Imagine how may personae (plural for persona) you might have done this with previously.

Nice to see your restraint with the LOLs BUT there are quite a few missed words. Had you properly Proof Read your draft prior to submission they should have been caught.

Your potential for this genre is improving, and becoming quite probable. Carry on, you are getting better!