All Comments on 'Jebidiah's Change Bk. 01 Ch. 01'

Very confusing. Not very interesting. I think I'll skip any new stories that come out on this.

Hopefully the edits to the structure helps my new readers.

Seriously. Tell a story, not a statistics class.

I understand, valid criticism, it's not for everyone. All of that is a bit heavy for an opening chapter but that math shapes the society the story takes place in. If I repackage all of this later I may move it somewhere better suited, but it's my first attempt at writing, mistakes were made and will be made later.

love it reminds me of Piers Anthony incantations of immortality, got me hooked

Ok my guy excellent start I'm hooked 5 stars

Looking forward to reading the next chapter. Thanks for the roster as well.