by jennahale
Well constructed and well paced; a tried and true theme, well handled, especially for a first timer.
Do you think you are being creative? Half the stories on here end like that! I liked it until the ending.
It makes a potentially abusive story positive, and one in which anyone could proudly engage.
I actually liked the surprise change at the end. I know a lot of people didn't.
It was hot because it was a fantasy. It's porn, come on, it's all fantasy. The ending was good because it acknowledged it.
Any chance of this being an audio story too? Your current audio story is pretty hawt.
Thank you everyone for the feedback, I'll take everything into consideration when writing my next one (I'll even listen to you Mr. Anonymous - Thanks for your negative feedback on my non-creativity). And yes, I'm thinking about making this into a audio submission for those of you who were wondering :)
Just read this story after listening to your recorded one. I personally think raping a woman or screwing a farm animal is repugnant. But, to each their own. I liked the fantasy element much more than an actual rape, so ignore the guys who hated on you. They have plenty of stories to keep them busy.
What's wrong with " Quiet and you won't get hurt." , instead of " Shut up, slut ! " ?