All Comments on 'Jen's Photoshoot'

And the narrator is...? Let guess... Jen'ssss... husbaaand?! Of course it is. Who else would be standing around with his thumb up his butt while some schmuck talks thumbutt's wife out of her clothes and then takes suggestive nude photographs of her?

Bleh

3 stars

That was very good for your first story. Maybe they will meet again when the pictures are ready and Jen comes back to collect them. I wonder if she will like them. Thanks for sharing with us. Looking forward to your next one.

WE? WHO WERE "WE"?

More exhibition category than lw

Terrible writing.

Somewhere in there is a good, if much overused storyline.

This reads like an example from an English grammar class on how not to do it. 'Complementary', 'discrete' etc. etc all misspelt, apparently no idea what paragraphs are for. Rather a mess.

I was so confused when the line “ I had to take a call and left them to it …..” came in, I didn’t even know the narration was actually there. You need to work on developing the characters and their relationships.

On a day of worse-than-usual posts, you somehow claimed the bottom of the barrel for yourself.

Not that the story is worth caring about, but who in the story was married? I don't understand why people put crap in Loving Wives that don't even appear to have a wife in them. It's just plain stupid.

Add to that, there was nothing in the story to fit this category, even if Jen was married.

In summary, a poorly written story placed in the wrong category.

Who is Jen? Who are you? Fun descriptions. I’d love to read more and know more about the people involved.

As bad as if I had written it.

My wife Stefanie surprised with some pictures of her. They were taken at a studio in a town about a half hour away. I didn't know at the time. I was very happy. They were great nothing inappropriate 6 of her in 2 different one peice bathing suits. I thanked her for them. She was happy that I was pleased. It wasn't until I accidentally stumbled onto a box that I didn't recognized while hunting for some paper work that I needed. I opened it and was shocked. They were nude pictures of her. Probably a dozen with a man that I didn't know. She was to be home shortly. So I layed them out on the dinning room table. I heard her pull into the garage so I sat at the table. When she came in I heard her call out to me where I was. In the dinning room. She came in and seen me sitting with the pictures. Omg Wayne I'm so sorry. For what getting caught, me finding the pictures, or for you naked with another man and allowing to be photo's to be taken. Did you pay them with sex? So you are an adultress and a prostitute now. No she said crying. No to what question Stefanie? I said I think that you need to give me some time and space maby you need to move in with your parents. No what about the children? I will keep them I'm not sure that I want my children around you. OMG are they my children. Yes they are your children I have never been with anyone since we have been together. Except for your stud? He is not my stud I only posed with him nothing else happened. He didn't even feel your ass or breast. No. Look at this picture. There was no mistake that his hand was on her ass. It may have been resting on my butt but he didn't play with any of me he was very professional. Yell right. I think you need to call your parents. She was begging me to let her stay. Finally I said ok but I will not let you sleep with me until you get tested. OMG really? Yes or call your parents and that may be permanent. Ok ok. Good I said because I'm going to be tested. We went together out of town where we wouldn't be known. We went into the same room. The woman

Dr looked at me with a look that I was the cheater. I looked at her and said to make it clear it's not what you think. It took a while for us to get as close to what we had before I don't think it will ever be the same. She cried a lot and continued to apologize for letting it happen. She asked if we could burn the pictures. I said not yet I might need them later. I visited the studio and threatened them and demanded that they destroyed all of what they had of her. They argued about it until I said that I would let my lawyer handle. They promised that I had all of the proofs and they deleted everything on the computer. When I got home I said it's time to burn the past and move on. She was very thankful. We have moved on and now have grandchildren.

Who are these people?

You never bothered to introduce us to your characters or explain how these events fit into their lives, so…

Why should we care?

First story!

4

This seems like an excerpt from a longer story. This story has no conflict, just a recitation of actions. This was more like a documentary.