All Comments on 'Jen's Secret'

WOW!! This is another GREAT story! Well written with lots of action in all the right places to keep the reader... eh hem... motivated to want more. ;) Another great work and I enjoyed it ... thoroughly. ;)

I really liked the way Elizabeth kicked that drunk guys butt while helping Jen at the same time and the rest of the story was also good as well

Very good.

Strikes me that while Jen's husband is an arsehole, she's not going to be much better off with Elizabeth. The way Elizabeth "seduced" Jen would have been tantamount to rape if a man had done it. There are no really likeable characters in this story, sorry.

Really like to see the story continued. Enjoyed it immensely. Well done.

Nice. I get the feeling as a follower of yours for a while now that you really tried to tell someone else's story for them.

Loved your story. Is this a story about you? Seems like your feelings are for real in here. Well done Thanks.

We loved this story, it was a very good read, it was very sexy and enjoyed the buildup. Got us very excited while reading... Keep them coming!

Writing is obviously your craft. Your phrasing, action, and character development, a gradual scenario painting are first-rate. I found th a hot beginning and it made me wet. Thanks and please keep this one going.

xoxo,

Di

Some hot scenes but…. Felt a tad contrived. She did say she wrote it after a request from a reader though. So if she was trying to hit all the points the reader wanted I guess I can see how that could make it seem a little forced.

Overall good though.

We go from woe is me (Jen's conservative upbringing as always) to fuck buddies with no build up. The story lacks balance and direction. Either iron out the feelings of characters or right straight sleaze. Hybrid stories usually don't work.

"The wife beater stood over Jen with menace in his eyes as she tried to get to the emergency call button. Jen felt the wife beater grab her leg and pull her back along the floor towards him. She spun around onto her butt and raised her free leg back and kicked him in chest. That dazed the wife beater for a moment and then he moved back in towards Jen. Jen then saw the blur of Elizabeth coming through the door and her foot come swinging around, catching the wife beater in the face and dropping him to his knees. She quickly followed up with a punch to his ear, an elbow to the back of his head and finishing up with a knee to his face. The wife beater crumpled to the floor as hospital security and the other police officer came running in." So this is what turns on women. Always the monster men - somehow they always get mentioned on this section. MANHATERS LET YOUR FINGERS RAGE. LOL

You obviously haven’t read much of my stuff.

This was a specific character. Not an indictment of all men.

But if it helps you with your generalizations, good for you.