by gasissynora
Too short. Chapters need to be longer otherwise people lose interest. Great story though so far
I love the way you set the story up . It's very seductive and sexy. Can't wait to read more about Jerry and Rikki
I really like the slow sensual build up and the more gentle tone in the piece. I agree with the others... We need more.
I am really enjoying the story of Jerry and Rikki and I am quite intrigued so far, the possibilities are exciting, thank you, TG Tiffany