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All Comments on 'Jessica My Too Thin Twin'

by GiddyDreamer

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AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
Good story

Good to read a story where the girl doesn't have perfect proportions and the guy a big dick. Sexy can be thin or thick.

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
Can have been good

Spoiled by the crap about the pill

He should have just pushed is cock in as deep as it would go and shot his cum deep up inside her unprotected pussy

This is story land no VD or babies

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
Well

You're obviously no writer, so you'd need to work at it to improve. I feel that with some of the phrasing, the way you put this together, you may be...a middle schooler? Pay attention in class, and apply yourself.

Keep at it!

clearedtofuckclearedtofuckover 5 years ago
A letter

This was more of a letter to a friend than a story. Develop characters and build up the sexual tension.

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Sexual tension and giddy sensuality are what I always look for in erotica and I try to reproduce those emotions in my stories. After three years here, however, I have few illusions on my talent as a writer. Some readers do not care for my particular way of writing and I unders...