All Comments on 'Jetsam'

Beautiful

A first-rate story, Wanda, and I loved every word of it. It's a perfect mixture of discovery, love, tragedy and rebirth with some very goods turns of phrase. Shame there's not a new story like this every day but that's the luck of the draw. Some days almost all of the new tales are brilliant, other days not so much---mind you, the poor days make the good days so much more welcome. Jetsam is one of these "five stars, I wish it could be more" contributions.

(I know what you mean about some West Country locals and the way they drive on those narrow, twisting roads. Been there, seen that, almost got the t-shirt a couple of times!)

I am not entirely sure what we did to deserve a second story so soon, but thank fuck because that discovery just improved my whole week tenfold. Not that I've ever been disappointed by a story of yours, but I'll happily report that both qualify as home runs even by your extraordinarily high standards - wow, what a ride! I'm so going to add this to my tray of "reread if happy or sad"-stories and I honestly can't wait to discover all the little details I missed this first time around.

I've been reading your stories for what must be half a decade now, and every comment heaping up praise still feels weirdly inadequate - I don't suppose I'll get over that any time soon, then. I equally love how gut-wrenching your depictions of grief and how ecstatic your depictions of joy are; how sympathetic to your protagonists your storytelling is, and how serious you take them. The note from your introduction really struck a chord with me - the feeling of you trying to do right by them, of you wanting something better for them, jumps out from every line and makes even the tragic parts uplifting. Love it! And as always: I cannot wait for whatever you decide to do next. Please be back sooner rather than later? :)

P.S.: I will say that car-shopping wasn't something I was expecting to be taken along for. Not that I'm complaining! It is still interesting, though - your stories tend to tell tales that (to me at least) feel very insular, very isolated from reality as a whole, and people leaving their bubbles to go do everyday stuff - even things like grocery shopping in a Porsche, sitting in a dockside restaurant, watching football with roommates - is always a bit like waking up from a dream. Suddenly there's people, and things, and I'll be a bit disoriented for a minute or two.

Life is good. Two 'Wanda' stories in a matter of weeks. No-one on Literotica writes longing and loneliness as well as you do, or lifts their characters out of it with love and lust as expertly. A story worth the reading. Thank you.

I hope you will write more about Kelly and Ash this is a very moving story of unhappiness and finding each and love and cannot wait for the next chapter of this story you are a brilliant write again I say excellent story please do not keep us waiting to long thank you onehitwanda. xxxxx

Seven stars. Absolutely wonderful!

"And, bit by bit, the immediate horror eased into the background as the mundane laid a thin layer of cheap varnish over it." Holy cow. It's authors like you that terrorize the rest of us into only being readers, never to attempt our own version of a similar telling! I was happy to see you had a story published. I was hooked in early, and had to finish the thing. Such lovely emotion, and growth of the characters. The pain, and the resolution. Thank you for this gift...

Beautifully poignant, sensual love story between two characters so real, so alive — I felt like I got to know them; could feel their joy, pain, fear. The blend of dialogue and introspective moments perfect. This piece is the second of yours I’ve read; the first was Sketching Sophie. Yes, another mesmerizing romance, but different from this piece in ways that reveal your vivid imagination. Both 5 stars. Please keep sharing scenes from your mind. And, by the way, I, too, am a latte consumer.

wonderful story,luved it...So well written

A wonderfully well written story. I was captivated by the two characters as they slowly built a relationship, sharing in their fears and embarrassments. There was some great dialogue and no little wit ("Bellatrix Lestrange after she'd licked an electrical socket"). But when Ash finally opened up I felt so much pain that I briefly feared that this was going to be a tragedy. This is work of the highest quality. Five stars are not enough.

one of the best stories i have read on this site ,amazing ,please write more about this couple i feel there is a lot more for them to do .thank you

This is a beautiful story. The skill you have in bringing these two fractured people to life is wonderful. Your words painted the scenes in my mind so clearly I felt that I was there watching.

Coincidentally we were thinking of spending our next summer holiday in Dorset and this story has made me more determined to make that happen. I can’t thank you enough for sharing this story with us it has given me a nice warm feeling of happiness.

I will read this again and again..... . Such a beautiful story. Thank you so much for the posting.

Omg, absolutely adored this. Thank you for such a beautiful and well-written story.

Excellent. I have waited a long time for for another piece from you, Wanda! Lovely sensitive and intelligent writing.

Loved the story and emotions of life in turmoil to an ending of the sun setting and a new beginning, definitely 5 stars…

I'd like to echo what Mainaigh said better than I could. Thank you for this and the previous stories

I really love this story. The icing on this cake is - for me, at least - the repartee (for lack of a better word) between Ash and Kelly whilst they're still figuring out one another.

"The coast is ravenous and I am delicious."

"Go ahead, the bodies are all buried out back under the hedge - let me know if you see anything twitching and I'll grab the pitchfork."

"The paint's there to tell me when the road is too narrow."

Absolutely love those. They may be old hat to you, but to me they're hilarious.

You lost me at the point where they start making love the day after the accident.

Been there, where I was in a mini car, stopped at the last second and thought I was saved, and then was thrown like a toy by a car behind me, and ended up in a total-loss car with me mostly unharmed.

Thinking about sex a day after that, is quite not convincing. The crash is such a huge break in your boundaries, that the idea of anyone broaching one's physical boundaries is quite unthinkable for a while.

So

Great story and very well developed. I love the characters and how their relationship developed. Super job.

Brilliant story, 6 on a scale up to 5. Particularly enjoyed the dialog, very natural and relaxed. The comment of the Queen writing a letter, and the field where you grow your... TERRIFIC!

Truly, truly wonderful. Such an uplifting love story. The characterizations are simply perfect, so much so that I feel that Kelly and Ashleigh are now personal friends of mine. I can honestly say that I feel better for having read this story and I'm sure that the grin on my face will last all day. My only regret is that I am only able to give five stars because the tale deserves so much more. Thank you for bringing this ray of sunshine into my life.

Simply awesome. Sue x

Simply beautiful. Will live long in the memory.

What an amazing story. Outstanding. So well-crafted, sensitive and involving.

It's such a great part of the UK... So many childhood holiday memories... If I was going to have a passionate romance I'd definitely go to the Lyme Regis / Charmouth area to do it.

Wow

Fantastic!

Fucking brilliant! The well crafted mix of self discovery, vulnerability, humour (their dialogue brilliant!) and romance had me hooked. I was surprised to be doing other things but once I started reading I couldn't stop and..... Oh well, there's always tomorrow.

Thank you for posting this 😁

Really enjoyed your story of these two young woman. Now that my eye's have been opened to your hidden talents, I'll have to go and read your previous works. Thanks so much and Merry Christmas to you.

Love your writing. I devour every story you put out. Thank you for sharing

Beautiful story, so well written, thank you.

There are wonderful storys to be found in Literotica, This is one of the best. Some may equal, none above.

As always I cannot give this story the number of stars it deserves. Your stories are always moving and this one may have been the most so of all. Thank you Wanda for you wonderful ability to make these characters come to life. 5 Stars it truly deserves many more than that.

I absolutely loved this beautiful story! It was well written and the whole story flowed very smoothly. It is already marked as one of my favorites, and will remain there. Thank you for sharing this story with your fans.

Soo soo beautiful...

Thank you for writing such a beautiful story. You captured a lot of pain and deftly turned it into redemptive promise.

Very sweet.

I was engaged, intrigued and hopeful that it would turn out the way it did from the start. Thank you for a lovely story, told in a very moving way.

A beautiful tale, two lovely girls and the future looks rosy!

This was my first read of one of your stories, and now i am going to check out the next..i hope there are more...

Thank you.

well done when i get lost in the story theres no better complement thanks be well happy and safe shayne

You certainly have a hit Wanda. Sorry/not sorry. :)

A lovely tale of two women coming together. Two women at odds with themselves, falling in love and living happily ever after. Who could ask for more?

Your stories crackle with sheer quality but this one is an absolute belter l think I’ll read this more times than I’ve read all the others and while I understand the one hit I’m still longing to learn what happens on Saturday night (London Girl)!!!!!!

I think this is your best ever, and that’s saying quite a lot.

Absolutely beautiful writing

That was absolutly beautiful! I loved it and look forward to your next story. Beautifully written, flowed well - just great! Look forward to many more!

"I'm gonna climb you like a squirrel "

Was ok up until then, then I had to give up sorry

Well, that was something to say the least. Something amazing. I didn't expect to get that invested into this little world, but with every page it got more under my skin. One could really imagine the beautiful scenery at the waterside, listening the gentle sound of waves braking. Also I saw quite a lot of myself in them, especially in the beginning. Wanting and needing to belong, searching your place in life - or in someone else's life -are such powerful motives. Helps putting your view on your life in perspective.

Absolutely beautiful. Thank you!

As a nod to the Royal Navy.

A magnificent story. Five stars!

Almost too much drama, but who am I kidding? I love your stories, the emotions are always so strong and authentic. Thank you.

Damn Wanda! Wonderful story, not a fairy tale though, which is one of the things I love about your stories - real life on the page. I also love how you nail your characters personalities, attitudes, mannerisms, their lives, the space they inhabit and all with a minimal amount of words. That “Cheap coat of Varnish” phrase broke me, that is exactly how the mundane works in that situation, and yes I’ve lost people so I’m aware. Thank you for writing and posting, cheers, Ppfzz.

After your recent post, I had to go back and enjoy many of your earlier stories.

I both love and curse them. There are the most heart felt and gut wrenching stories that never cease to bring both a tear and a laugh.

But damn it woman! Every damn one of them stops like there should be several more pages!

So like most of the old men that enjoy them, I will wait for the next one with hopes that it goes just a little bit further.

An utterly heartfelt and heart-warming story of two lost and damaged souls finding each other and finding happiness. I’m so happy for Ash that she will have lots of happy times with her Mum from now on.

Is it weird that I've sat here on a re-read (or three or four) Google mapping Lyme Regis, Exeter, and Ringwood?

Thank You! I'll take this as my retirement present.

Imho you write three kinds of stories; very good, excelent and fantastic. This was the latter category.

One of the most beautiful stories I've read here.

Another superb story. i’ve been reading your stories one after another….

Being a new fan, it is a twohitwanda that I enjoy reading. I anxious to make it 3 for 3.

Beautifully written - a lovely story

Absolutely captivating! 5*

Another fabulous story. As a long time lurker I don't know of a more consistently good writer on this site.

Brilliant !...you really ought to consider writing a Book !..

I would have expected more self doubt and questioning from a woman who had self identified as heterosexual when she found herself attracted to another woman.

Loving your stories even if it hurts a bit when I find myself laughing one minute and crying soon after. Brilliant! Course I’m a sucker for a love story with a happy ending, so I’m very happy I found you. My life certainly didn’t parallel either of these women, but I related to so much of it. It felt vey real. Thank you

Beautiful. Simply beautiful story...

Another great story, thanks for these.

Just. Wow.

Such intense affection and.. everything.

Shit like this could make a man wish he'd become a lesbian himself

I liked the kale touch. YUCK!

Excellent story! Well developed! Nice flirtatious build up to very hot sex! I was flowing like a river!

Best Regards,

Kathy

I was rereading some of my favorites, and this keeps getting better each read!

Just an amazing story -- deep characters, well-written drama, and really hot (but realistic) sex scenes. I cried at least three times. Thank you for sharing it!

A beautiful portrait of developing love. You really feel you know these people. I've only given it 4 stars because there are places where I found myself skimming - it could have been shorter and sharper.

Beautiful. Amazing. Intimate. Exciting. Made me flow in several places.

Every story of yours that I read deepens my awe at your mastery of the storytelling craft, the richness of your palette of characters, situations and feelings, and your flair for bringing them all to compellingly vibrant and vivid life. And that's not to mention your flawless prose!

Well I just cried my eyes out. I hope you wrote full novels somewhere, I could read your writing every day.

Another tender, deeply sexy novella from you. Your writing is sublime.

You are, without question, one of the finest writers on the site.

A v cute story! I feel like a lot of life events happen in just three weeks, but the atmosphere and slow build up is great! I love how this is a romantic story instead of just a sex story, and there is a world for these characters.

... but worth every moment.

This was the best story I have ever read in this site. Just sublime.

You know, as I finish yet another of your stories that I absolutely loved, I think perhaps one hit Wanda is perhaps a misleading name!

Onehitwanda, you have out done yourself with this story! Every so often on this site I read a new story, that I think is 'now my new favourite one'... That's just happened again. I genuinely didn't know want this to end, it was such a great read. Thank you :)

This made me cry, you are an incredible writer.

I love the gentleness in your stories, in this cruel and heartless world they provide a little haven to escape to.

What a roller coaster of emotions. Loved the tender love between the two, the grief they shared and the hope for a future they had. It was a shame that the red lace bra and panties went to waste because of the car crash, but I'm sure they made up for that at a latter time. Loved the story, thanks.

Truly amazing story.

Beautiful story.

It’s been almost nine years since I was last in Great Britain and your words have transported me back to my childhood and a culture I’d been disconnected from. I’m delighted every time I read your writing—it’s a beautifully woven tapestry of imagery and storytelling. Thank you, truly.

A love story based in Dorset near one of my favourite places in the UK, Lyme. I am very familiar with the Life boat station on the Cobb and Marine Parade having visited Lyme more than twenty times in the last 30 years :-). It made the entire story more realistic for me with the mention of places I know and love. I will now go and see if you have written anything else that will be of interest. Thank you for sharing.

Second time reading, still as fresh and fantastic as the first time.

So love your stories, you build scenes that bring the reader into the lives of the characters, the sex is loving and tender unlike so much that is the norm of 'wham bam thank you mam'.

I really enjoy the fact that they're all set in England, in places I recognise.

I've read all your stories on here, all have their merits, for me the best are the those marked as lesbian.

Please write more of what you enjoy and I'm sure we will too.

Thanks for sharing this story... the thing that stood out to me the most, here, was Kelly's ease in embracing her identity and needs, I think. Like, the anguish is about self confidence and also trespassing, but it's not about "ahhhh how do I be gay." She realizes what she wants, eventually, and accepts it beautifully. This isn't to say that stories with more "ahhhh how do I be gay" are worse, in any way—but it's lovely to see a tale like this once in a while. Cheers!

So many good comments, I agree with them all. I love the writing, the story and especially the characters.

This is superb! The story, the prose and the characters all work beautifully.

Above all else, I love the dialogue - it feels so natural, and really allows the characters to shine. Plus, some of it is genuinely really witty.

This story has become an old favourite, i can't come accross it and not read it again.

Words fail me. Bloody good storey.

I was absolutely over awed by this storey. So real and believable. The storey paints a picture so vividly and relatable, especially if there has been a similar experience personally. So good do not stop writing. I think I need to find another storey to read that would be as heart warming especially at this time of year.

I laughed. I cried. This one really grabs you, with its compelling story (that I can relate to), plus wonderful dialogue. It's a story to visit again from time to time, like a dear friend.

Second (or maybe third) reading. And this is a complete story. I was thrilled by it and by your writing.

Coincidentally, my wife just got a promotion and we are likely to be moving to the south of England, so it was fun (like several other of your stories) get closeup looks at that area.