All Comments on 'Jezebel's Forbidden Pleasures'

Not erotic at all. You just recite facts as if you're doing a middle school report.

As a writer I do try to portray characters, narrating in this case from the perspective of someone who isn't necessarily as sexually versed as peers of their age or implied maturity might do.

Gotta stretch the wings... sometimes it works, and sometimes...

Great story! I felt like I was looking in a window.

I didnt read where you licked her pussy to orgasm. She sucked you and you didnt return the favour

You clearly have all the elements, but the juiciest parts you downplayed....I gave you an 8.