All Comments on 'Jillian and Jake Get Lucky'

Thanks you kept it believable and timed your action very well

It has been a long time since I have come across a short story as powerful, well timed, and well told as this one!

Breathtakingly wild. Reminds me of John Galt without the superciliousness.

Well written and thought through.

May be the best of your stories so far. I look forward to reading more in the future.

Boyd

Great story and writing. Sweet and erotic.

Larger than life but erotic and romantic. Well done, Dinsmore.

this was pretty nice.the action part were also a real man's fantasy.hope u keep writing.

You did it again, thanks and keep up the great writing.

I really like this story. It does occasionally need more "showing" and less "telling," but overall it's quite good. Also, one more run-through by an editor would've been a good idea. I've noticed you misusing the word "picaresque" in two different stories now, when you meant "picturesque." Could be an autocorrect issue, but it bugs me, especially with it happening twice now.

Nit-picky issues, but I think these things would make a good story better. Thanks, and keep writing.

Wow, I loved this story! I loved how it started off very nasty and naughty, then became romantic and loving! This, to me, is one of your best stories. Wonderful Job!

that was a well balance romance story it's one for the books. it kept me smiling until the end. excellent work

As they say "There's one woman for each man and one man for each woman"

AND you cannot find a pairing bad enough to win with - the difference is in being bad NOT being evil.

Some bad is good we all know that - we all do that - you just put it out there in terms that some people can;t keep up with - beauty is in the eye of the beholder.

There is never evil intent or desire to harm nor abuse by your characters (not the winners anyway) so there is never a reason for them to NOT make it work - not really.

Good lessons here.

Such a sweet story with a little bit of the natural naughty included. I'm off to read some more of your stories. Thank you.

"He didn't smoke or drink to excess".

(a) With a comma:- He didn't smoke, or drink to excess. This means he did not smoke at all, nor did he drink to excess.

(b) Without a comma:- He didn't smoke or drink to excess. This means he both smoked and drank, but neither to excess.

All I have to say.

Your writing is exellent,do not mind the grammar police,they are idiots

The storyline is superbe,it could have been in erotic-couplings but romance is just fine

On a personal note i'd like to add that theyr personal life,aspecially the sex part,may have some obstacles in the future,people that sexual rarely stay together in the long run or they may become swingers or have an open marriage,i hope that theyr future will be together without any troubles and blessed with a couple of kids

One of my frequent complaints in life and on this site are encounters with people who have no experience with relationships and know only about sex from the darkest corners of pornography. I was worried at the beginning of this story that we were going to find a kid who had not progressed beyond his early teens emotionally. I was happily surprised and delighted to read about two adults with aggressive and curious desires that complimented each other. That they were also professionally competent, intelligent, and physically fit were bonuses above and beyond.

An excellent story about two lucky people.

thanks.

You used the word "picaresque". I believe you wanted "picturesque". Picaresque refers to a novel that is episodic and usually has a lovable rogue as the main character. You can't use the word to describe a town. :)

LOVED the story.

Really,really enjoyed this story! - To anyone who hasn't read it,do yourself a favor and do so! You won't regret it! ~ Rated this one a perfect 5 !

Wow, another home run. This story was entertaining in so many ways, the love, the budding relationship and finally the

happily ever after. Dinsmore, all I can say about the cheap shots that anonymous critics have taken about your stories from time to time is to ignore them.

Another 5 star performance

Outstanding!😉 ~ 5⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️s!