All Comments on 'Jogging Memories Ch. 07'

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 7 years ago

This is the second time the bulk of your chapter was a re-cap. That's hapenned too often in 7 (relatively short) chapters of content. There's my only complaint, otherwise I truly enjoy your story.

InescuInescuabout 7 years ago
Interesting

But it's moving at a glacial pace with a lot of repetition.

Given the clues so far, I'm assuming the first wife cheated on him and he ran away. Given his abandonment of his parents, it's possible that she was screwing his father. That explains his reversal of personality quite handily. Nothing kicks you in the 'nads so effectively as a cheating spouse, turning our optimistic, flirty protagonist into the dour, serious man it was described he'd turned into.

Time will tell, I guess.

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