All Comments on 'John and Jackie'

you left us hanging.

Thanks, Bob, for an enjoyable read.

The previous poster asked what happened when she got the divorce papers. I dunno, how about this?

Jackie skimmed the legal document, the paper dry and crisp to her touch. She tossed the packet carelessly onto the coffee table and shrugged as she headed into the bedroom that was now hers alone. She noticed John's things were missing from the closet during her search for the new high heels she'd bought on Monday. Somehow that absence didn't seem very important right now.

"I'll deal with it later," she thought, slipping her petite left foot into the shiny black stiletto pump. "Right now, I need some excitement, something a little naughty, something John could never give me."

She switched on the porch light in the deepening twilight and deliberately swung her hips as she walked to the car, thinking of the evening she'd planned.

"It's just as well," she muttered. "It's not like he ever cared about me anyway."

and being the show! Not exactly a subtle nuance but it sure didn't occur to her!

As to the first commenter's question about you leaving the readers hanging ... well, I wouldn't hold my breath waiting for a reconciliation!

Short but sweet, Bob!

Regards, DJ

You're suprised by this? This bozo does it all the time.

to use our imagination regarding the end. After all what can Jackie say? She went to the adult theatre against his wishes and lied about it. Jackie adopted a lifestyle unacceptable to John so why do we need to read about the whining, crying and other actions (e.g., indifference as suggested by Alvaron53)? Jackie made her choice.

Thanks for this story!

SleeplessinMD

Ok the content in parts was almost erotic, but the private investigator made no sense in being done how many times by you....which has bored you so much you don't even write about it anymore.

In court, the pictures would only open the door that hubster was the enabler she would say and the judge would crush him for all he had. Got to use common sense instead of churning out multi posts as even you are bored.

I mean everyone in the world is a surveillance expert! Everyone knows how to legally obtain evidence for use that will be admissible in court proceedings! How could he possibly want to hire TRAINED PROFESIONALS TO DO THE JOB PROPERLY?! (please note the puddle of sarcasm here!)

Jackie knew all along what she wanted. And she went after it full time.

HOW ABOUT AN ENDING????????

tears, i am sorry, just sex...please forgive me, don't leave me...and he's done w the whore ?

will jackie have to be secretive about what she does during the day, at least to him

Far below your normal standards. Early on I couldn't tell if if was her husband or the hispanic that was doing things to her so I stopped reading and rated it 1*.

Lit is a good and free space. We have to tolerate him. But I for one wish we didn't have to.

You were too lazy to write the confrontation. Also, if the divorce was not going to devastate her, he needed to get some kind of revenge, as in exposing her activities to her family and friends, calling the cops into the theater, etc.

I've heard of "flash stories" but damn!

use of "he" and "him." The author generally used the terms to mean John. Sometimes, however, he used them to indicate another guy. That was confusing.

He was right. Things got out of hand, she discovered her "slut" side and it ended their marriage. Plan and simple tale.

Now what ?

...they get divorced. Pretty straight forward.

Reads like a newspaper article, No emotions at all.

What were the motives, where is the drama, and where the HELL is the conclusion.......

JPB has a number of categories you could stick his stories into. This one fits into the "Completely unfinished" category.

Amateur crap.

Don't start what you can't finish

i have no words for this, The author was bored And thought he just put something on paper ... He should have let it be ...

Sometimes this is all that's needed.

He needed private detective? What for? Anyway, this is yet another one of juvenile BS fantasies but without much in it. I am surprised JPB allowed comments as he is usually not allowing that for most of his idiotic stories.

That was really _____