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All Comments on 'Josephine's Training'

by skinnysailor

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abiostudent3abiostudent3almost 4 years ago

Critique on the writing: far too quickly paced for such a dramatic change.

Critique on the submission: this isn't sci-fi or fantasy. Even if it happens to have a fantasy setting in the background, this is clearly BDSM. You'll get a much more receptive audience over there.

Good luck, and keep writing!

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