All Comments on 'Josh & Laura's first forays'

....and the writing style. Could use a bit more descriptions, however.

Difficult to imagine positioning. Subject matter was fine, but the action described at times didn't jibe with three naked people.

The meat of the story is quite nice (but then I do have a preference for bisexual mmf), however you really should get an editor to give your story and grammar a once over. There are some awkward sentence constructions which seem rather abrupt and some of the words you use don't seem to be right for the meaning you want to convey.

I hope you don't take my criticism in a bad light. I can see a decent story here but it needs to be polished a bit so that it can truly shine. Hope to see more adventures of the couple in the future!