All Comments on 'Josh, Greta, Ted and Carla Ch. 02'

Is it Astrid? Or Ingrid? Not a bad story. Some misspelled words. I guess English isn't your mother tongue with some things you wrote. Not a bad thing. Decent character development. Good sex scenes. I'm not fond of saying the girls had fat asses or huge tits without some reference point. Looking forward to the next chapter.

3 stars

DragonRider55

WOULD LOVE A 3 CHAPTER

TED AND ENGRID GET MARIED

AND MOVE IN WITH JOSH AND GRETA

Sorry about the Astrid vs Ingred , believe me, it is a huge mistake in my eyes. I made up a Scandinavian name, confused it with another that must be an actual name as well, as neither showed up in the two different spell check dictionaries I use. so it never shown up. I can't believe I never caught it when I did a computer text to voice read back. Wish I had an editor, always have, but it is frustrating finding one. A little over a year ago I had never written any kind of story, and had very little english in school. I am improving, but this is embarrassing, after 36 stories I have only confused a name a couple of times in a story or two. Another thing I will find a way to use the computer to search out in future. Or just use common names american names, LOL.

Glad some people enjoyed it in spite of my biggest mistake to date. Some day I am going back to re-edit ones like these, that bother me tremendously. I really enjoy trying to come up with stories, but until you have written one you don't realize how much post work goes into getting them ready to publish.

Really great stories, got lost in the story and did not even catch the name issue.