All Comments on 'Journey of Discovery'

Your story has legs, let us see where they take us..........

But the campsite, really?

More please but dont ruin it by having them swap with the other couple.

It may just go that way

Great storyline but it needs more character development. It reads like an outline. Hopefully that’s helpful criticism

Nice start, let the games continue!

Great story that calls for more chapters. Thanks

For me it ruins it with the sexual innuendo fake names. But a quick copy, paste, find & replace, and the story was a fantastic start. But I agree with another comment, don't swap.

Great. He needs to keep fucking his "wife"

O yeah, nothing like mommie pussy

She took off her shorts and climbed into bed, then he unbuttoned her shorts again,

Very confusing. Was the whole story fantasy. What did he mean 'once we went back to reality'? was that going home? Why not ask questions and talk about anything they wanted to, they were in the camp for a week.