by westerntiger
Very hot stuff! Previous comment was negative about this "fantacy" story, pehaps I'm wrong but I thought most of this site was fantacy.
Personally this author is my favorite, this story is one of the reasons why.
Maddie
I thank the writer who had the courage to actually leave his name. I also went to see if he had written anything and he actually had - what a surprise. Most of the negative comments from writers on this site come from people too scared to leave a name or who have never written a story in their life. I don't agree with Goneoffshore - but I respect his courage.
Although very hot, in some respects, this is typical 1970's "stroke book" prose. Mind you, if Marvel Comics did porn, you'd have a job.
I totally get the fantasy aspect, but this is so far out of reality as to be laughable; Though I would like to see Stan Lee do illustrations.
And if you'd like a pointer or two, try using contractions when writing conversational dialog, 'I'm' instead of "I am", etc. Otherwise you sound stilted.
Sure hope they will get together for another encounter soon.