by FrumSexStories
Realized I gave the Male protagonist two different last names, so that's an issue.
Can’t tell you how many times I’ve seen broken shopping cart wheels on the ground. How about never. I’ve seen plenty of bad wheels still attached to carts, though.
Yeah, good point. Should've had her push the cart into her or something. Lets go with suspended belief to cover up my bad plotting
Strong plot, could use more backstory for both of them. And proofreading. Two places with duplicate paragraphs, plus a few other errors. But a good effort with some tension as well.