All Comments on 'Just Beth'

could very well be your best yet, and that's saying alot....to one of my top 3 on the site, BRAVO!

you took your time, and you came with this, good writing great story.

....sweet serendipity....I knew this marriage was in trouble from the get go when you espoused the feminine approach to work stress, venting and listening,venting and listening. Why is it so hard for men to train their honeys to problem solve, and actually clear the crap off the table? Since when is wearing a raincoat taking a "full" shower?! And haven't you used that line about the Kama Sutra before, olr was it Av Writer?-At any rate even at 3 A.M. with the pages coming and coming it was a joy to read, absolutely your best piece of finely nuanced descriptive writing I've read, I think I've read everything you've posted. I could live right in this story author, with scenes like when she brought him lunch at his office, -you've gotta love a woman who honors the little things you've done in the past. Add having her remember how much you've spent on her and you've built a better Eve!

Slirpuff

Has to be your best yet. Great story, good characters and the right result.

5 stars , This was a good story . Long but I dont see how you could have made it shorter . Good read as usual ! Keep writing . Help us keep out the wimp/cuck/swinger/swapper faggots that have been bombarding LW . Again welcome back , your stories have been missed .

This has got to be the biggest sucker I have ever read. Waiting for years and years until he got engaged with his girlfriend and later she consented for sex for the first time?

The husband deserves all the shit that came his way, and much more for that matter.

for a story that is very close to the bone for many working couples. There are predator arseholes in the workplace and this is pretty much how they operate. Sure she was over focused on her career, but she is not the first nor will she be the last to do so. I don't know of any guy that would go for the length of time boyfriend/fiance did saying hello to 'Rosy palm and her five ugly sisters', but that is part of the writer's story - it is his story. What really impressed me was the fact that the writer didn't have Beth jumping into the sack with Carl then crying sorry. She got her reality check and her hubby stood firm without carrying on like a loose goose. Liked it heaps.

Slirpuff, you have come a long way. Your thought processes are amazing. Please keep writing. You are one of the stand outs on this site.

Cheers

OldStormy

improved over the years, good work, glad to see they are still writing

LIKE MOST OF YOUR STORIES I ENJOYED IT. SOME QUESTIONS ABOUT THE TIME FRAMES; ENGAGEMENT; NOT ENGAGED; PUTTING UP WITH HER; BUT THEN EACH TO HIS OWN. I STILL FIND TOO MANY MEN PUT UP WITH THE WIMP ATTITUDE.

There are very few true loving wife stories in this genre but I am glad that some writers follow the title.

Balanced - Down to Earth - Reasonable. Keep it up!

Thank you. I loved this story, well done.

great story. flows well and good plot and characters.

thanks

Excellent character development

This truly was a pleasure to read. You have developed into quite the writer and I very much look forward to your next submission. Thank you!

Excellent story and a good read. Could not ask for a better story and includes all of life's ups and downs. Thank you for sharing with US.

Outstanding story. You are an excellent writer. You developed two strong characters and were consistent through out the story. Pls keep writing

A great story and an entertaining read. Thank you author for your efforts.

Although it was a tire old theme, you brought it to life with excellent character development and a captivating story line. The main characters had their flaws, just like in real life, but I could imagine them being real people, living real lives.

I stumbled a couple of times when the narrators switched. But that's alright. You did it gracefully and it was just a surprise until I got used to it.

Your skill as a writer is awesome and this is one of your best.

A real down to earth Loving Wife story without cleaning out the bank accounts, using the Navy Seals, the Army Special Forces, Martial Arts or guns. Just simple use of grey matter. Communication is a powerful thing, even if it is somewhat limited.

A great story that I enjoyed very much. Thanks.

As my generation used to say -- out a sight.

S,

Too bad Jimmy Stewart can't star in the Movie.

Great writing. Oh so too life like to be imagined in a story and smooth as silk writing. Proud of this one aren't you! ...as you should be. Thanks for sharing on Lit.

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A very enjoyable and well written story. Please keep it up.

This was a well written and well thought out story. You always do a great job and I look forward to your next work.

Much to long and boring, two people in big jobs with two kids working ungodly hours and had no money, what were they being paid nothing.

This is it! Real life, real story telling, real characters. And to top it off, fantastic writing.

When I saw your post, I knew you made my friday and how true it was.

Thank you very much. EinM

...and an extremely worthwhile 5 from me.

Thanks for a great story.

This was my favorite of your stories. You developed the characters well, including their change from being youths to mature adults. Both were likable and believable. Too often in stories here one or both partners are too perfect or two dimensional. You gave both of them real depth.

I enjoyed reading this story about a couple who loved one another but went through rough times. I especially liked their commitment to each other.

The storyline was slightly telegraphed when you switched to Beth first person, but that really didn't matter. Your treatment of Carl was your one weak area. I don't think that a predator like him would have acted as he did once she started reconnecting with her husband. Usually they understand when to press and when to back off. I think that he would have backed off then tried to get her with drink or drugs. Overall, this was a minor issue.

One last comment on the story, I enjoyed the more realistic sex scenes. I can't help crack up when I read about all these overly endowed men screwing repeatedly for hours on end.

I assume you allowed your editor to make corrections, this was really top drawer. Make sure that you don't lose her! Just a heads up, it's "wherewithal", not "where with all".

Many thanks,

ttom

I almost never comment but this is one of the best written stories I have ever read. Well thought out and respectful where it needs to be and enough erotica to keep it interesting. Excellent. Thanks

When you compare this with the earlier work, the learning curve is very steep. You may end up a professional writer yet. Perhaps doing TV dramas....

Nice to have two human beings behaving in a reasonable way and still getting out a good story.

Slirpuff is a winner!

I agree with what most of the other folks have said. I thought that it was a very good story. The scenario where the wife becomes close with a male friend and confides with him about her marriage is always fertile ground for a good story in the Loving Wives section. Thanks for sharing the story with us!

Just too good with a twist. Without a doubt, Slirpuff, you stuff just gets

finer and finer.

Thanks

Well written story. Nice to have a story with normal flawed people who actually love each other.

Another very good story.I honestly can't say it's the best thing you've done, cause you've done some damned good stories over the last few years. But it is a damned good story in its own right. Somebody once said that you have got one of the greatest ranges of any writer working on Lit, and that's true. You do a lot of different stories with varied plots. A reader never knows exactly where you're going, except in the last few years your stories have gotten stronger and stronger, the writing better, and you're really good at creating believable, lifelike characters. What can I say except that when I see your name pop up on a posting it's the first thing I read. I'm glad to see you back.

When a person starts talking to other men about her marriage, it can send up a red flag saying that she is looking. In a way, Beth could be seen as urging Carl on. But, assalt is still assalt, even if Carl was drunk. Please, keep on writing.

Excellent story. I enjoyed it very much. I am glad there wasn't cheating and I loved the retribution at the end. Great work!

I have been following this author since his first posting. Without putting too fine a point on it, his earlier works were... grim. This is, far and away, the most enjoyable read his has submitted yet. It makes me think there is hope for the old "Loving Wives" catagory yet.

Worth reading and my time. I know it was long but didn't seem that long. Well paced and good story line.

5 star

One of your best

Keep writing and I 'll keep reading

Thank you

You out did yourself on this one. A pleasure to read, just a loving couple trying to cope with life.

Great story. Please keep writing

Possibly the best one from this author to date. I think it read well, there were few technical errors, and it was very credible. Great job, and thanks for writing.

With the right amount of psychological tension and retribution.

This is one of the most self-important authors on this site, a man who cannot spell or punctate, and you assholes think his writing is GOOD?

This is over-the-top shitty, pretentious, illiterate tripe.

Who in the God DAMN thinks this is "superb" writing?

Fucking idiot can't distinguish between "your" and "you're", and I'll get flamed for being a grammar nazi.

*sigh* What idiots.

Thanks for another good read, and your grammer skills are better than a lot of the folks who dare pen a tale for Literotica. just gotta love the anonymous critics.

I've enjoyed most of this author's stories, this being one of the better ones. Cheers! Connoisseur29

was Steve a Faggot? it would seem so

The anon who said Steve is a fag is more than likely deep in the closet. The anon who said you are self-important is an idiot. Yeah I said it. I can spell & punctuate too. Submit a story so I can tear it to shreds & unlike you, I won't hide who I am. Anyway, I enjoyed the story. It was an easy & thrilling read.

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Usual great tale (5 stars). How refreshing it is to have a consistently great author in this section who does not turn the husband into a cuckold wimp who crawls to a cheating wife. For those authors who seem to delight is humiliating a husband..take lessons here!

One more really good story, Slirpuff. I always enjoy your product. Makes me wish there was a score higher than 5.

you're a romantic at heart, Slirpuff. thanks for the story.

A great story. One of the best. Too bad there are only 5 stars to award. Hope you offer it to Hollywood. Finally, can't Lit reject comments from "anonymous"? Many of them seem to have come from pathologically dangerous minds.

I have read widely on this and other sites and this is top drawer. Character development, storyline, sex scenes, and the finale - almost flawless. Keep up this progress and the sky's the limit. I have always enjoyed your efforts and knew I was in for a great read as soon as I saw your name. You did not disappoint. Well done.

I have been reading your stories for quite awhile, and, to me, this is the best one. It was a really enjoyable read.

I like reading your stories. I am always entertained. I thank you for that. I do just have one question about the ending. You wrote that Carl pulled out in front of a semi that was going around 60mph. The truck itself would have also been totaled. The trucker most certainly would have been injured if not killed. What happened to the trucker and his truck? I am just trying to make a small point here. When you include others in the story like that, and you have done so before as I recall, perhaps you could also explain how they fared as well.

Like I said, I like your stories and will definitely continue to read them.

Three negative anonymous comments and you want to eliminate all anonymous comments. The vast majority of anon comments praised this author and story. You Sir are wrong. You seem to be a hypocrite. Why not blast all the "named" negative comments on some stories, and don't tell me there aren't any, we all know better. Author, I have always regarded you as one of the better writers on this site. This was a good entertaining story. Well done and thank you. (Signed-ML)

It was hard for me to decide if this story was more, or equal to, watching the grass grow. Not your best effort.

You have come a long way from your first story. What I likes the most was the realism and straight talk about holding a marriage together given the modern pressures. You did not try to portray either Steve or Beth as perfect or with some weird sexual fetish. I get tired of those stories where the wife try to make the husband a wimp or the husband is dying to see his wife with another guy. Just dealing with assholes, daily grind and normal expectations as a parent is enough to create the drama in a marriage. Thanks for a great story - don't let the bastards get you down!

A actual Loving Wife story, thanks.

AS always your a top shelve writer tk you for a great read without the wife beening a cheater. This is a close look at why the devorce rate is 50 %. People stop talking to each other and start talking to others.

Can't say it is your best because I love several of your stories. However, the writing may be your best. You have come a long ways!

No the truck would not be totaled. Maybe some fiberglass work on the hood and some new lights. If the driver was wearing his (or her) seatbelt he/she would have survived. The truck drivers feet are higher than most car roofs and all the weight is below that. I saw 1 car truck collision that was very bad. The car was rolled into a cylinder but the truck was still driveable. The driver was more than upset. Sorry author. This space should be for you but I had to say that. Thank you for this story. 5 stars. Jim .... sorry...cant seem to log in so I will be anon jiminab

You start with a kid narrator, talking and acting like one, confusions and self-justifications and awkward syntax and all, mix in a difficult and determined but halfway decent girl, equally immature in her own way though later an equally determined but naive woman, and track them through the major early stages of their "romance" (it does need quotation marks) and then marriage and mutual maturity. She remained a bit too naive given Carl's tirades, I think, making judgements too easy for your readers, I think, but scaring them with her vulnerability. Yet you often took chances (the indeterminately difficult first pregnancy reflecting how difficult life with Beth can be, e.g.), until the happy ending reflecting their achieved union had been earned -- and it was certainly welcome. First rate! I have no idea whether you read these comments after a first month or so -- I look in on mine, on another website, maybe only every other year -- but when I've read more of you and commented on more I'll cue you, A first rate writer needs to know that his more subtle talents are also appreciated.

I love reading a loving wife story. Not every wife wants to fool around as the stories in the loving wife category tend to depict. Over all, the story moved quickly yet with there were sufficient details and closure. Great read!

Once again, after reading one of your stories, I wish I could write like you! The main characters, Beth and Steve, are well constructed and beleivable. I love the way you have both of them grow throughout the story. While Beth is naive with regards to Carl, it is not hard to see why she would be that way if you consider that Carl didn't start out as the angry man going through a bitter divorce. He started out as her mentor and friend, a relationship that developed over years. Sometimes, it is just hard to see how some people change, especially when you only expect good from them. You make allowances for the things they are going through, thinking that it's just because he's under so much stress. However, sometimes, they are just assholes, or at least become assholes because of what they are going through.

Anyway, great story! 5 stars once again!

Steve in OH

This is an excellent story and I enjoyed it very much. Original and true to life. Both characters behaved like real people, were interesting and believable in how they handled their daily problems. A good account of love and what brings people together. The aspect I liked least was the character Carl who seemed to be an import from a stock Loving Wives story and who seemed melodramatic in contrast to the rest of the story. I would much rather have read about the consequences of a real-life problem, perhaps with bringing up the children while both parents are working, or a real work problem like redundancy, or disappointed ambition and the effect of this on the couple. Clearly one or other was going to have to compromise at some time and it would have been interesting to see how they would have got on if one went on to greater success and the other did not. Did they love one another enough to handle that?

No relationship is ever always easy. We have to work it. And the little things is what makes the difference. The holding hands, the card here and there. Hugs for no "reason." Kisses and snuggle time are what give a mariage fertile ground to grow in. If you love her, you will do what is necessary to make her your queen.

I am going to buy a flower for my wife today.

Oh, the story would have been just fine without killing off Carl.

Carl's creampies for a year at least, at least he is a financially secure cuck now

Good plot, well written, blah, blah, blah and so forth. The only thing I didn't care for is the calloused remark about Carl dying at the end. Obviously, Carl was in a bad place after his divorce and most people really don't have much control over their own behavior in those devastating and traumatic situations but unfortunately they are still responsible for their actions. He could only use the skills he was taught to deal with his crisis which were obviously inadequate. He probably really was a friend of Beth's until he went a little crazy. Especially, having to listen to Beth complain about Steve for so long. I tell ya, your hormones are all out of wack in those situations like divorce or the death of a loved one. Again, not an excuse just an explanation. Afterwards, he was just trying to cover his butt and probably still thinking he was a better man for her. Still an excellent story. Truly a Loving Wives tale. Just take out that one paragraph and you have a winner. Maybe, replace it with," Last I heard, Carl was in a mental facility receiving the proper treatment needed for his depression and anger issues surrounding his divorce and women in general.". Thank you, nice read

I hope he suffered before he died. Cheaters are scum.

I would have been pleased to see this to be a story about the right and wrong way to re-connect with your wife. Obviously, Carl was doing it the wrong way, and his life was in the pits for it. Beth should have seen what had happened in Carl's marriage as a wakeup call, and done the opposite of whatever crap he was spewing.

Didja kill her? Didja billy?

Nice little story with a believable "happy ending". Would've bet my last money against Beth about half way through but found myself hoping she didn't wind up a slut wife.

Not often in this genre that you find a story where BOTH husband and wife had integrity and some moral character. Yes, they had problems, after all, how could you have a story in this genre without them?

What I really liked is that they worked on them and that the husband took a leadership role ... with Jill's help :-)

I thought it was interesting that she made him wait years before agreeing to sex and only after they were engaged. However, she wasn't a virgin so did she have sex with others before or both before and during her ongoing relationship?

Reading between the lines, it was before she met him that she was sexually active. Perhaps she learned something about being too easy and then went overboard in the other direction.

Every great once in awhile, I get to read a real story, a great story, that washes the taste of those shitheel cuckold fag wannabes out of my monitor. I have to go thru a ton of stories, most of them utter crap with anything but loving wives, in order to see a story like what you've written, and I can call it a fair trade. I'll put up with the endless, nutless whining drivel and the commenters who I seriously hope never leave the privacy of their houses with their sick fetishes in order to read one good story like this one. Many, many thanx.

You've come a very long way as a writer.

Thank you for this good read.

And thank your editor for me.

FD45

Another fine piece of writing. I liked how you shifted from his point of view to Beth's and wonder why you didn't do that a little more it added a nice bit of tension and made the story less like a narative.

I liked the tale a lot. I would quibble a bit with the limited use of Beth's perspective. I sometimes like stories where the "his/her" perspectives are used. However, in this story, it is only used very limitedly. And, it was kind of pointless, imho.

Your writing has gotten better and better.

I liked the story's emphasis on how career and relationship can so often be at odds. Too many stories in the LW gloss over what is all too often the cause strife in real-world relationships (not that many end becasue of a nypho wife chasing foot-long cocks; most end because of break-downs in communication, job stress, and deprioritizing of the marriage).

The one thing that made me shake my head a little was that the wife seemed rather stupid at one point in particular. Her husband had repeatedly pointed out that he thought her boss was too involved in their relationship, she was aware that there were objective reasons to think he might be coming on to her, but she did not raise a stink when her boss referred to her husband as "Mr. Asshole" and told her she should leave him. Those are REALLY aggressive statements obviously designed to push her towards divorce. I cannot believe that she would let those statements slide.

I have been reading most of your stories and you have come a long way to become one of the better writers out there. this was a put together nicely ,no wimp and no cheating. most marriages have there up and downs but this was a great read. one note the attorneys probably got 33% on the settelment plus expensives..

I agree with all of the comment below and more. Slirpuff is truly becoming one of the few most successful authors on this site. Thank you for sharing.

Considering that both hubby and wife are complete morons the happy end came kinda surprising. I am not even going to dignify that law bullshit with a detailed analysis. They had no evidence whatsoever. Ever heard of false accusations ? You better. The lie detector BS was a hoot nontheless, very good. Oh wait, that shouldn't have been funny ? damn.

Beautiful ! Like the husband I too sensed Carl was upto something. Being a chic , we seem to think the best of everyone we trust a lot more and we are a bit slow... But I immediately felt this Carl jackass was a predator. It's like he was trying to push Steve out & move himself in. She had no business telling him about their marital problems I made that mistake once & my husband flipped. I didn't see it as this guy I thought was a friend trying to get in my paints but my husband did. Same thing with a man sharing marital issues with another woman...Predators is what they are, they take the information & use it to their own advantage. She should've instantly told her husband about the garbage he was spewing, so they can work on it together.. I'm glad she didn't sleep with him

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ffs, delete your account and try again when you turn 18

but 2 working together can make inroads into the divorce stats. TK U MLJ LV NV

my god this is bad. Steve comes across as loser.. chasing after a dream - Berh -- that could not give a shit whether he lived or died . When he findally gets a clue Steve gets angry with himself and Beth

I can understand why Steve in angry with himself but Why beth? She was never in anyway dishonest

SECOND.. a year later when they meet .. Beth upon learning about Steve's ring SUDDENLY wants to get married. Okay.. so fucking what? Why does Beth seeing the ring now make a difference?

THIRD during the marriage ALL of the arguing all of it . EVERY fight they have is started by Beth. Go back and re-read it. Look at the fight on the top of page 4... over a back rub? NO women ever turns down a back rub to relieve stress ... unless she doesnt want you. Period .

then the next Morning Beth ... supposedly coming over to apologize comes after him again... HE is the one over reacting.. HE is sulking.. and when Steve is leaving her alone --which IS what she demanded and screamed for-- Beth comes after him AGAIN.... !!!

"Good, maybe now I'll get some sleep at night without someone slobbering all over me."

So in the space of 24 hr Steve has been screamed at by Beth to

to leave her alone...

go jerk off in the bathroom and

stop slobbering on her ....

and Beth NEVER actually apologizes.

Then when she sees how bitter and twisted Carl has become Beth goes on a business trip with him to Chicago and goes up to his room?

after the near rape... Beth doesnt tell ANYONE. She does not tell the Police or Human resources or her husband ( the riped blouse that Night would of told the police that the boss was the agressor) .

a story of idiots

Most rapes and attempted rapes go unreported! Most victims have a sense of shame & that they brought it on themelves.

As for your other comments; do you have a life? People change.

It was realistic, enjoyable and touching! 5/5 and considering Slirpuf is one of my least favorite authors, this is high praise.

An amazing story. A true loving wife who is committed to her family. This truly made my day, and I think I am going to try the rose thing with my own wife. I love stories like this. Not only engaging, but a finely crafted tale. Excellent writing.

Not Carl, but Jill. Without her would Steve have ever got his head out of his ass. Killing Carl off was too easy.

Harryin va is such a condescending self absorbed clueless prick who has no idea about the real world. Ignore losers like him. Very well done slirpuff. You are the second best author in this category. But thays just cus im partial to qhml1. TEE-HEE

Nice to read a real love story for a change. This points out how stupid the rest of them are out there. Love takes perseverance and strength to get through the confusion and the troublemakers out there. This couple worked hard to build and maintain their marriage. That is what it takes, nothing is for free.

How did I miss this great story for so long? Really good! Thanks!

5*

The characters were well developed and strong. I would've liked to have seen the author devote attention to Carl's thoughts about Beth and his plan.

He sets up a meeting and demands that Carl be fired . With no proof only his wife's word. So he ties to scare them and expects them to cave in to his demands and if they knew of Carl's past incidents they would have fired him . Way to unbelievable how this went down.

Great story thank you for providing such enjoyment.

About 3 or 4 pages too long, but a good read none-the-less.

are tough to comport a life style. TK U MLJ LV NV

Thank You!