All Comments on 'Just One Time'

Sarah made the right the decision!

5

Smart girl making a good decision. J_W with yet another great short story.

When ego is involved it's amazing at what you think you deserve. Well done.

Nice little morality play. More, please. Randi.

*****Short and so true birds of a feather flock together!! Thanks for sharing.

So what did she do?

I've read something similar but I'm sure it was finished. Still, well written so 3 stars.

While well written and understandable, we are left wondering what eventually happened.

Absolute rubbish not even a story?

A great cautionary tale. I loved the twist at the end.

Short and to the point. I really enjoyed this twist on a common trope. Please ignore anyone that says this story needs more. It was great as is.

But it is too short! We don’t know what they were eating or what kind of car they drove. Did they meet their husbands in high school, college, or at work? Ack!!

Thank you. This is a textbook example of a quality very short story.

5* Very effective, beautifully written and just the right length for the vignette. The twist surprised me but it punched the message to Sarah home. Thank you for another great little story.

Very good twist.

That was an interesting idea for a story.

Harsh for the friend who lost everything when she didn't do the cheating, but she was right about the loss of trust killing a marriage.

Spot on! Right in the center of the target bullseye!

Good story, what a lot of cheaters and their accomplices need to read!

Thanks author! Five stars!

Why does author this days wrote incomplete stories, at least put some epilogue you twat

A brilliant vignette, the best work of this length I've ever read on this site. 5 stars all the way,

A story that's been done even more than that February sucks rubbish, just the names changed, but otherwise almost exactly the same.

“Nobody ever things of everything.” So true! For a very short story, the author manages to convey plenty of emotion. That’s a gift. Thanks for sharing.

A nice, short lesson. D

Amazing.

Love the story.

Nice one Just_Words.

Too short. It had so much potential with your excellent writing. Oh well onto the next one.

Not very new but well told.

This is not necessarily fiction. Many times, when everything seems perfect, some people want more, and many times infidelity is the result. Then, when it crashes, the guilty party, or parties, are left with absolutely nothing...

Nicely done.

Good for Sarah. Everyone needs a guardian angel sometimes.

Has legit happened…well written.

at least one has sense

"he knew all the right things to say. They started going out for lunch. The lunches got longer and turned into dinner. The conversation became more intimate. Dinner became dancing and pretty soon they were planning to go to bed together." - Not directly related to this story, but this gives the lie to the wives who say, "We just fell in love." It's a progression, just like the progression that led them to fall in love with their husbands, and in can, and SHOULD, be stopped at any step in the process.

Well done Sarah!

Oops! I wonder what Sarah did to earn that piece of karma.......maybe five pointy things applied to the right part of the anatomy might have helped her friend's thought processes?

Really …. The perfect flash tale. It delivered a powerful message in an effective manner — by highlighting how collateral damage can be just as devastating as a direct hit. How enabling bad behavior can be as bad as actually doing it. A former enabler who suffered the consequences manages to convince an enabler candidate to back off. The open question: will Sarah’s last minute dose of conscience be enough to convince Melody to back off?

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5 *****

Good one, original.

Now, if Sarah was a good friend with backbone, why shouldn't she arrange for the future cuck to get wind of Melody's pending adultery so that He could head the pending disaster off at the pass?

Facts

Plagiarized from another story almost verbatim.

This story is more worn out than a homeless' shoe, but the Rednecks will still rank it as hot...

Sometimes that spider web catches more than expected.

If Sarah is going to not be her alibi, she better let her husband know what Melody has planned and what the strange lady said. Melody’s married is pretty much toast now, even if she doesn’t cheat physically. The planning of cheating is enough for me. If Sarah heeds the woman’s warning, she will tell Melody’s husband if her husband wanted to do so. Bro Code and all that.

Very nice. A great short read.

I will you submitted more stories.

Wow - That was a "new" twist on this trope. Great job! 5*

Just one time I wish you would a second chapter and reveal what happened in the end.

Good story but the ending feels incomplete

loved this one. well done, short and to the point

Congrats

Another good one. Original also, can’t help the cheater, only the friend. Thank you

If you want to cut your own throat so be it, but I'm outta here.

This is an awesome story! Deception and the fall out from it can effect everybody involved and you spun the tale in a great short story.

Great story.

A real friend wouldn't ask you to do something like this.. a real friend wouldn't risk y'all friendship, most importantly your marriage.. if she wants to screw up her relationship, that's her business... but once you start covering for the cheating slut, you've become an accomplice.. in the court of law, an accomplice gets just as much time as the person who committed the crime... this woman isnt a friend to anyone... no real friend would put you in danger... no real friend is going to ask you to help them destroy their relationship as well as yours....her husband would've had every right to divorce her.. by her covering for her friend, she's basically saying she approves of what she's doing. she doesn't see anything wrong with her friend lying, deceiving and betraying her husband... of course her own husband would feel she is cheating also. Of course the trust would be gone.. it doesn't matter she wasn't the one cheating.. she helped her!. It would make anyone wonder, if their spouse was also cheating also... do I believe the slut changed her mind after the ladies story? Fuck no!. That twat is itching for another cock... nothing will stop her from getting it scratch... you can also tell she wasn't planning in this being a 1 time thing.. if she enjoyed she wasn't going to stop, if she hated it she wasn't going to stop... cause she didn't enjoy it, now she has to find another cock to get the job done.. I also had a problem with this friend not telling the sluts husband.. aren't they all friends? How can she keep secrets from her husband? I tell my husband everything🤭..he's my bestfriend..no way would I be able to keep something like this from him.. he would've definitely felt I approved of my friend lying and cheating and he'd start looking at me funny.. he would have every right to. People don't know the definition of true friendship or marriage... there's no such thing as one and done in a marriage.. if you wanted to continue to fuck others, you shouldn't of gotten married..... perioddddd 🙃 ... marriage is not a light switch you can turn on and off when the mood strikes you... forsaking all others mean just the fuck that.. I just don't get sluts... I did all my slutting in my teenage years, like a normal person... once I met and married, I had no desire to try out new dicks.. if I did I wouldn't of gotten in relationship, let alone marry.. I always planned on being married once. I just don't get the logic that marriage vows are something you can play with.. like it's a joke... it's a contract with not just the government but with God.. this is why open marriages are not considered real marriages to me... abomination? yes, real marriage? no.. the story was ok but it was too quick.. we don't know what happened to the slht, to the friend, to the husband.. it was just ehhh.. so I gave it a 3... it's what It deserves 🤸🏾‍♀️

Ok, this writer, one of my favorites, insists on continuing to write little 'vignettes' when he's very capable of writing very good and finished stories. But, this one seems to be complete, and well done. Just disappointing to those of us who lazily want to lose ourselves in free literary masterpieces every morning.

Short and well done, 5*

It's a good BTB story, without really being a BTB story.

It seems I read a similar story recently about a wife that was about to cheat that was scared straight. This was a well written flash focusing on the alibi giver. 5 stars.

Smart lady! Desert that sinking ship of a friend and move on. True friends don't ask you lie to your own spouse.

Excellent flash story and most certainly a perspective we don’t see very often.

Nice story. I sure hope she listens to the sad tale.

5 stars. Some readers might ask for a part 2 or more, as in what happened to the cheater. Please don't. Your story says it all.

Well done. Creative look at cheating from a unique perspective.

a word to the wise...

Good short story.

Yep, lying to cover for a cheating friend shows a willingness to deceive. It's not much of a stretch for the spouse of the accomplice to suddenly have grave trust issues. Trust, one broken, is extremely difficult to repair.

Could use a second part

nice story left up in the air. still worth 4 stars

Frito-Lay knew how hard it is to stop at just one when they came up with their ad campaign for potato chips. You keep telling us truths we need to remember,

Good - not very often do LW stories tell of the collateral damage to an arrogant CHEATER.

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5*****, Hooyah, Salutes...

Very good. Thanks

Very nicely done!

Good story

And the albi became smart

I enjoyed it, direct and on point.

A wonderful story ,with a strong message. LP

all actions have positive or negative reactions

Yep if you cover someone cheating how can your spouse ever trust that you wouldn't do it

Thanks for writing

Good story. Those that cover for cheaters are just as much at fault as the cheater themselves. A real friend would never condone cheating and in such cases the husband should be told about the wife's intentions.

Well told and good advice.

Excellent story. My wife didn’t have to provide an alibi, her friend’s husband (who is my friend) never asked. Later, I learned she’d known about her friend’s affairs nearly 10 years, when my friend finally divorced the cheat. Maybe she didn’t explicitly lie, but IMO my wife helped through silence. Yes, it created a trust issue.

Yep, you can get burnt if you are too close to the fire.

Excellent story. Short, but powerful. 5 Stars.

Excellent!

In 990-words, you wrote an entire master's-level cautionary course! Risk Management for Marriage! 5/5!!!

It felt incomplete.

That was so cool. Friend realized the errors of her way . Cheaters rarely proper.

Nicely done. Short and to the point. 5*.

I was hoping it would be longer but it is still a startling five stars.

@WhoGivesAShit - Twice in recent weeks one of my stories has struck too close to home for a reader. I am truly sorry. For me they are just bits of fiction, but I understand that for some they are painful memories. I hope you were able to move beyond that bit of horror and rebuild trust.

Great short short story.

@Tilan - Do I understand that you think I'm preaching morality? I'm not. This isn't a morality play. It's a lesson that actions have consequences. If I tell you "Don't reach into the fire or you will get burned" is that a lesson in morality or common sense? If a wife teaches her husband that she will lie for others, it is reasonable for him to wonder if she will lie to him. Personally, I think he needed to work with her to rebuild trust because she didn't cheat, but I also understand that actions have consequences.

Excellent! 5*

Well done. Its great to see someone do in one page what other require 11 or so to do and accomplish even less.

So true.

Good tale, nicely done. 5*

@MaximusMad

What more do you want? The main character in this tale was NOT the one plotting to cheat. Melody IS the ‘adventurous wife-to-be’ but the MC is Sarah. Her story (and future alibi) is over. And probably her respect for, thus friendship with, Melody is gone also. Sarah, whose brain was untwisted by the ‘Sad Divorcee’ (the Heroine) Is unlikely to ever talk with Melody again, nor Melody to Sarah - who wouldn’t go along with Melody’s plan! It would be anticlimactic to continue with Melody’s future!

Really very well done; succinct and compelling without being preachy or long drawn out. Thanks for the effort.

Well done! Perfectly executed.

Sarah made the right decision. We can only hope that Melody will do the same when her alibi walks out. Not a lot of hope for Melody's marriage, though. She's bought into the I-deserve-it-and-won't-get-caught fairy tale. Great job, JW.

The friend would have covered for the cheater. No high road as she didn't really realize what she would be doing would put her own marriage in jeopardy.

Nicely done. 5 stars.

Wow! That was awesome and to the point. Loved it.

I gave a 5 also. It isn’t the type of story we look for on literotica, but it was real. Nice job. You also could have additional stories if she chooses to go ahead and cheat.

Brilliant. QuickMagazine has read a lot of LW stories, but I don't remember this plot twist in any before now.

Though maybe my memory is flawed. Maybe I forgot about one of Just_Words' other stories. Anyway, this one doesn't waste a word, and I second LPN's comments. A 5, to be sure.

Why do I feel like I've read this story before (a year or 2 ago)? Other than the end of it, it was similar to another story. In that story, the other woman who told her story to the women, got in to an SUV and was talking with her husband trying to tell him that the woman who was going to cheat was now having second thoughts about doing it after her friend said she wouldn't cover for her.