All Comments on 'Just Remember I Told You'

Glad it worked out for the hero in the end!

5

Sweet story, bro. Had to give it all the stars. Randi

Always a pleasure to find a new story by you. 5*

Nice and friendly. 5⭐

That was another great story from you. 5*.

Nice one. 4 stars

Well done. Thanks!

A soothing story. For a change. Thanks. D

Fresh air is appreciated! Good story thanks. 5*

This story comes across as one of those stories main character repeatedly gets a shit upon for no good reason other than in the fact that it's just life and nobody gives a shit about him. His marriage falls apart because his wife is a slut and his parents are too busy saying I Told You So to give a shit about how hurt he might be. He has problems at work because his father won't listen to him. And then he gets arrested is threatened with death from a mob and is falsely dragged through the media. His best move would be simply to pack up and leave town since nobody there gives a shit about him. Why he would even think about dating a news reporter who help to drag his name through the mud and make his life even more miserable makes no sense at all

Darn.

Very good story Mr. Ephesus.

I don't care about Laurie. Good riddance of a cheating woman.

It is been a while since we had a post from great writers sharing their tales.

Thank you.

No mention of an outsize appendage and ability of the MC to perform multiple times in 30 minutes.

Wonderful!

Only parts I liked were that Tim immediately divorced his cheating wife and stood up to his parents about what was happening at work. I couldn’t get behind Louise and Tim’s relationship based on how things started out between them. At a minimum Tim should have slammed the door in Louise’s face when she first showed up at his house, not invite her in for breakfast. He also should have sued her and the mall security, and local police for slander, public humiliation, endangering his safety as the crowd was determined to physically harm him. Even though he would probably lose in court, it would have been more realistic than inviting her into his house for breakfast the day after she had him detained and refused to listen to anyone other than her own judgmental and paranoid views. The security guard only made the situation worse when he dragged Tim away. The security guard should have remove the handcuffs and told the crowd that a terrible mistake was just made and the child was with her mother’s friend.

As for Tim’s safety when leaving, he would have been the safest if he walked out with Jeff, Jenny, and carrying Sophie instead of being snuck out a different exit and into an unmarked police car. Sneaking him out only serves in protecting the image of Louise, mall security, and police.

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You wrote that it was 4 hours to Houston and that Louise was already on her way back to their town before Tim start driving. She would have been able to turn around and beat him back to her apartment. Any of the family members could have called her told her to turn around. Unless they had already passed each other in opposite directions, she most likely would have beaten him to her apartment.

Great read! 5 stars from me...

Good story until the ending. Then, it became a great story! Thanks for a very uplifting morning!

You never disappoint me, E! Thank you for a wonderful story!

Enjoyed that.

Thanks for sharing.

Chocolate milk in coffee. Now that’s something I gotta try. Would never have thought of that. Ingenious!!!

Wonderful story enjoyed it

Loved the story. I would have loved a bit more depth around them drifting apart, but the twist that his boss was his father was well played! 4.7*

Great story!

Great story. Thank you.

A mini work of art, I enjoyed the warm feeling a good story gives.

Great story. Thanks for sharing.

A sweet story, well written. Thank you

Nicely done.

Nice to see a man not turn sour and bitter when life deals him a crappy hand. Really well done.

Well done

Nice

Good story. Thanks

Enjoyed it, but…..it just didn’t seem to go anywhere. Didn’t like how the breakup with Laurie happened almost off stage. Didn’t understand why Jeff was “slow”. Didn’t get enough info for how and why he and Louise clicked. Never got an idea about what tne family business even was. At tne end when Louise proposed to him….I just didn’t really care 😎

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3 ***

Great story with a happy ending which most writers neglect at the end of their stories.

Good enough, really. But shouldn't it be in the Romance category? The marriage was just a setup for the Romance that followed. We know a few bland details about the failed marriage, but there was no discussion, no remorse or guilt, no examination of the whore wife's lack of character, or what made her betray her husband. Lots of successful marriages start after a very short time dating, so simply giving us the timeline doesn't explain why the wife cheated, and then abandoned him. If the whore wife was that shallow and unethical then how could the marriage be good up until he caught her cheating? None of those questions were part of your story. Again, the marriage was just like a prop to put things in place for the subsequent Romance that was the real substance of the plot.

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Good story, satisfying ending. But its always interesting to find out what happens to the whores.

Very good story. Did Tim try suing Martin or Rodger? It seems odd that Tim's attorney took his divorce to get back at Justin Jr.. Also Tim had a case against the Police for excessive force and they didn't even take him to the hospital to be checked out.

Well written, but she's very lucky he came home. Having been cheated on once already, it could have been more likely he'd take a long trip and not talked to anyone. Scars can do that, which is why it's stupid to "surprise" someone like that. It's playing a stupid game, and risking getting a stupid prize.

I'd have thought that, having lived apart, she'd have enough brains to keep clear communications. Or that his parents would have told her "baaaad idea!"

Just a minor point - He was going away for two weeks. He came home over a week early, yet he's snowed under at work? What would they have done if he was gone the two weeks?

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@Anonymous Re: Suing - It was explained in the story: Right now, he's relatively anonymous, and everything is dying down. Suing will make his identity public, and even winning won't entirely clear his name.

Delightful story.

Yup, 5 from me. Good story.

Kinda like LW at the VERY beginning, where Sweetie is driving away with with all of her stuff. Hard for We-The-Readers to give a shit about her tail-pipe (all that WTR saw of her … save a little afterthought.) Then WTR get the full Romance story! Good accounting, but Ephesus# is a good-to-great story-teller!

5* despite it being 10 percent LW!

Good story,happy ending

I do like a fast paced story; we'll call this the 'anti Chopped Liver' kind of story. Could have used a little more on Laurie and just why she said she would never cheat, but did.

Well you wrote a MC that doesn't have a spine or balls.

You're a great story teller!

Excellent

1st wife character wasn’t really developed, but I guess that was the point and analogous with their ill-conceived marriage.

As usual, the kids are the true stars. Sophie sounds just the sort of cool niece an uncle can be proud of 😃

4 stars - I liked this story

It was good but a bit convoluted like several stories rolled into one.

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Chocolate milk in coffee is not as outlandish as it might seem. Go into any Starbucks and people are merrily shaking chocolate powder into their cappuccinos, or at least they do here in the UK. Not my thing but hey-ho.

Nice 5 stars

Just lived this. Laurie left in the rear view and life vigorously pursued. Waiting for the boss to call and have him back to work only to have the bosses wife call instead, priceless. The story is so well written with unique aspects and engaging characters. One of the best I've seen in quite some time.

WINNER! 5*

Nice misdirection with him not getting into her place and her lying on the phone!

Well done sir!

Roger was getting out of a bar one night. Next thing he knew he blacked out.

It was the middle of the night when Martin was woken up by an insistent phone call. He answered with frustration in his tone that immediately switched to panic. It was the hospital, hid son was found unconscious and it looked like he was brutally beaten.

He rushed to the hospital and was told his son was in a stable condition but was in for a long recuperation period after the beating he took.

It was morning when he was sitting in his sons room with the tv was on in the background when he found further details about what happened.

Somehow it got out that his son had his wrists, ankles, knees, elbows, shoulders, knuckles, almost all of his joints broken. However new details were posted online by anonymous sources.

The video of the beating was extreme. It did not take long but it was precise and without emotion.

The blow to the back of the head sent Roger face forward on the cement, chipping his front teeth and breaking his nose.

He was flipped then 4 guys spread his arms and legs and using Louisville proceeded to hit his joints a few times to make sure they were broken.

The only sound heard was the that of the bats hitting their target. The screen faded to black and a list of the Rogers actions came on the screen.

It ended with "Martin made sure his actions were covered up. He could of raised a good son, he could of been an agent for good in this community, all he does is rip people off and cover for his homewrecking son.

Do you really want to do business with such a man? Do you support a family with such lackluster morals and because of which so many kids are from broken homes now?

What if your family is next on their list? Do you think they will care about your kids not having two loving parents together?

Actions show that Roger takes what he wants and Martin covers it up through whatever means necessary. Vote with your money, choose your shops better.".

He knew this was the start of a very bad day. He should of put an end to his sons actions a long time ago, he could of done something better. After firing Jeff he nearly lost half his staff and after word got around and Jeff opened his shop fewer people have been using his shop.

They were right, he could of done better. Now he's sitting in a hospital with a son that may have lost the use of his limbs and with his dirty secrets out for the world to see.

He could of done better.

Why are we writing about mentally challenged indivduals and manipulation of said individuals?

It was an okay story. That makes it better than a lot of what gets posted here, but still falls short of what it could have been.

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It's not surprising that he was cheated on, as he seems to be little more than a doormat. He works for his dad in an apparently unimportant role and is not respected by either of his parents. He just kind of goes along with whatever crap he is served. The one exception is when he actually divorced his wife, but that was more about setting the stage for Louise than him actually growing a pair.

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Looking forward, I don't see a much better future for him. He's now married to a woman with impulse control issues who has no problem with inflicting pain by lying and manipulating him. She may not have cheated yet, but it seems the most likely outcome.

I enjoyed your “real people” who had real life problems. Nice touch at the end when it was a Happy Ending. 5*.

Very nice story. Get yourself a proofreader/editor to add more adjectives and descriptions in your story.

Check 'mislead' and 'misled'!

And a few other instances of using the wrong words!

>>"Let it go, I guess. If I tried to sue for false arrest, it would get out and my name and picture would be out there for sure. I don't want that to happen, and the police were doing what they thought was best at the time."<<

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As an attorney, I would suggest MC do exactly that: sue the hell out of the officers, the department, and the mall. Why? That forces a very public acknowledgment that (a.) the officers overreacted (They could've handled it quietly as fully 98% of these cases of mistaken intent are handled.), and (b.) to receive a public apology. You got it wrong because the incident, as described, is a public record, and anyone can find out his name either by accessing the report via the state's open records law or via a FOIA request. One of my first cases--one that nearly came to trial--was almost this exact scenario. The firm I worked for actually represented the injured party, Pro Bono. That's a minor quibble, tough. This story was, like all your stories, a masterpiece.

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"Laissez le bon temps rouler, cha'!" That part of the deep Sou'f, right?

What a great way to meet. "Allegedly" kidnapping her niece only to end up married. Cute.

Made me smile. Thanks much.

Enjoyed the story, especially the ending. Thanks for your writing.

This author is one of the best authors here. Not every time good, but enough to be recommended for what he is writing. Original plots, multitude of characters, and realistic behavior. Albeit somewhat sugary. But in any case, worth reading, head and shoulders above the rest of the junk in LW. Every time I see his nick in a new story I know I would read it sooner or later.

BTW, you should really try to monetize your writing.

Overall good story but when did she get pregnant? I mean the author makes it seem they really weren't all that involved any more?

"Houston was about four hours away from us, but Louise and I concluded that we could deal with that distance and maintain our relationship.

And we did.

For six months. Then the trips to see each other and the phone calls began to get fewer and farther between.

The downside of course was sleeping alone; at least I was"

Also she let him believe she was cheating in order to get him to go home??? WTF and he is marrying her. Uh no

A 5 all the way. Looks like some are disturbed it does not follow formula - which is its strength. We do not need lengthy looks back in this story. Well told.

Very enjoyable story. I particularly liked the reveal paragraph about Tim working for his father. I had to read it several times b/c my thick brain was not expecting him to be working for his dad. After it sunk in, I found it to have been very cleverly presented. Nice writing.

Loved the story. I’m sure I haven’t read it before, but the scene in the mall where he was held for kidnapping seemed to be familiar.

Excellent.! Thanks for the great read. It kids in my favotites.

I wanted more from Laurie. Why cheat?

It got predictable after you introduced Louise, so I stopped reading then.

Fairly standard cheating wife story. Whore wife cheats on saint hubby. Hubby finds better replacement wife before the ink is dry on the divorce decree.

Frankly, it read more like a dry business report. It was devoid of any real emotion or conflict.

Another non loving wife story.

Good things should happen to good people, and this story represented that well. 5 stars shining!

Great story, well written. Laurie was just a small part in the beginning, then basically a foot note. Thought the Jeff character was a great addition. Lots of little twist and turns, like Tim working for his father LOL…. Plus the setup at the end Tim visiting Louise in Houston.

Thanks for sharing, made my day….

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Great story, nicely done. Gave me pleasant smiles throughout the story. "Let me hold your hand so I wont get lost", beautiful. We all need a happy ending, you certainly delivered. A well deserved 5 stars.

Titty-cock what? Great line. Still laugh when I think of it.

Nice work, Thanks.

Doc

Excellent story, thank you! 5 BIG ASS FUCKING HUGE FLAMING NOVA STARS!

When was this? The cops didn't even give medical attention to him and his concussion. Which if he hit his head and was knocked out from it he has one. Keep reading but damn really hope he sues them. They too dumb to learn if u don't sue them lol

He too much of a pushover for me to like. the turn around too fast for one page without a time skip. Dude almost died then almost got his life ruined the next day he is ok with it lol thats very laid back

Too much disrespect. Would have not accepted the proposal and dumped her

A very good story. You write with an easy smooth flow. I enjoyed this story from the beginning to the end. 5 stars from Xluckylee

Good story. Risky on her part. Could have gone tits up in a hurry.

FIVE stars well done and I was totally thrilled to read it

@NudeinMaine - I believe that _all_ of Ephesus14's stories were accidentally deleted, and the author had no backups. Another reader happened to have saved them and Ephesus14 is slowly re-posting them.

A typical 5-star story from a 5-star writer.

Nice story with a happy ending. Well done.

3 Stars as I would have sued everyone involved .

I liked it, and agree with JoebetterBnice; who said he had to re-read the paragraph on the reveal of Tim working for his father (his dad is his boss). I took 2 trips thru that line as well, until it hit me. I even scrolled to the top looking for a mention and didn't find one. It didn't quite follow the standard cheating wife model, but that's okay, as we've got enough that are or will follow it. Even in the non-con forum there are a couple including one that I read earlier that the husband got his buddies to gang bang his wife as revenge. I thought that was a different way to "burn her".

Great story. It went from a downer right back up to very happy ending. Nice twist with her proposal after he thought she had dumped him.

Another great story from Ephesus14. I hope that you will get your previous stories reposted. Well done

I agree with 26thNC. Great story. 6 stars, the Bear approves. (I can't count. Tough) I love happy endings. Would have been more but the asshole (you know who) is still 'walking around upright'. I love that phrase. More, please, sir. And the bit about his Dad being his boss? Priceless. Ihad one like that.

The BEAR

Rocky Femdom agitprop beginning ends with a lovely surprise HEA.

It may just be me, but I can't follow a story with so many unnecessary paragraph breaks

Yeah, mon. I’m’a sucker fo happy endings. Five Spliffs, thumbs up.

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Cute story

Good story. Laurie was just a plot device to move the story ahead and give the MC some heartburn. Louise was playing with a bit of fire icing the building manager to change the locks. Suppose of it started to turn ugly, she woukd drop the surprise. Like instead say: "I am in town at the house with your family please come as soon as possible, I need to talk with you.". If he guesses what it is, then so be it. The pregnancy was a surprise anyways. Happy ending was fun. 5 stars

As an aside the use of blackmail sex (which is rape) to cover up a one time cheating sexcapade is inane and a ludicrous LW trope. Caving yo the blackmailer just empowers them. Sure for credible threats of physical violence to loved ones l, or maybe severe financial or legal ruin, buy even then only at most a couple of times to stall, to get help and come clean, get counter leverage, or go to DA or even disappear with family. But just giving on with yet more extramarital sex (except now blackmail rape sex) is nonsensical. Maybe once because of panic. But come clean. Get help. If husband is Old Testament, then marriage is doomed anyways.

Cute story!! 5*’s !!!

GREAT STORY!!!!!!!

Always loved EPHESUS’ Stories and still do. I miss many of the stories that were somehow lost when he was dropped from Lit; I can sympathize cuz I was dropped too.

I wanted Tim to shred Louise for making him look like a criminal. Most news outlets will sensationalize the even and minimalize the apology. Laurie was a bag of shit too. Why can't predators be held accountable when they destroy marriages? It seemed like this story had some loose ends.

It was nicely written, and entertain at the end, I liked it.