by taknbistorm
Call her back and say yes jazz you want her I loved your story i hope you continue with the story.
Pat Murray
Atlanta,Ga
I really liked that you didn't make them both perfect-body twenty year olds, and that she was hesitant about calling - I want her to call, of course, in the next chapter, but it's so much more real for her to have doubts at first.
this was so good and you should continue the storie do let Jaz call Mara and let us know what they do together. this was very good!!!
I really liked this story and it is a great set up for a next chapter. Keep up the good work.
This would be a great story if you left out those silly one word space filling sound effects and stopped jumping in the narration from first person, to the second person and then the third person. Just tell the story and leave the silliness to comic books!
I LOVED the story because I think my wife Anne is going through the same emotions with a Lesbian neighbor . . . walks together, having coffee at a cafe, telephone conversations. I only tell them both that I think it is good for both of them to have a friendship but I hope it develops into something more and she and Deanna become lovers.
I can see no harm in at least trying it one time, if she does not like it then there was no harm done