All Comments on 'Justice is Served?'

Murder is a crime, adultery or even disrespect isn’t. Justice wasn’t served, it was ignored and the two people who were murdered deserved better.

Actually justice was served. Not prison but a miserable, diabetes full life working for peanuts and basically living off the land. As many may say, the cheaters got what they deserved: Death. Just sayin'

The only part of this story he saw was the brief section dealing with the Cajun accent. I sent it to him in plain English, and he translated it for me; he added the T-John character. Since he never saw the full story, any mistakes are completely mine, and none are his.

A well written, if rather sad story.

Mel was a piece of shit and got what was coming to him. Taunt a man that you're fucking his wife? Yeah, he needed a dirtnap.

Shea should have just got a divorce... especially after her lover was assassinated. Then again, perhaps she had no idea Beau was responsible? From her comments and actions, she certainly regarded him with contempt and she'd have to be pretty stupid to treat a suspected murderer like that.

The only one I felt sorry for was Beau. To lose his virility at such a young age, but still be understanding enough to his wife's needs that he let her take lovers was very laudable. It's just a shame that Shea clearly didn't appreciate or respect what he was doing for her.

points deducted for the political bullshit.

You’re a helluva storyteller RR. I still miss your Romance series. That’s where I became a fan. But this is a tight crime story that I couldn’t help but imagine expanding to 150K words. Compelling plot. And your stories are always good for a quick trip to Kentucky.

JB44 is absolutely one of my very favorites on Literotica. I’ll cross all genres and personal comfort zones to read his work. I appreciate your nod to James Robert.

Thanks.

I appreciate your dig at Jimmy Carter, just as I appreciate digs at Clinton or Dubya or Trump. Why should a writer censor his/her views and opinions? I find it disingenuous and weak minded for a writer or any other type of artist to pander to a broader audience by watering down their message.

... it was the law that wasn't served - the law is NOT justice, it just pretends to observe and protect. The disposing of the two disrespectful cheaters (as if any cheating can be respectful) was karmic justice, and the world was better off not having them wasting oxygen any longer.

5/5

if there is no possible way of catching up other than personal satisfaction, TK U MLJ LV NV

Good story and justice was served, actions have consequences, the two lovers paid for their actions. Life dealt with Beau, his punishment, which life gave him, was far worse than what the penal system would have done.

Another waste of time from wee dicks

Nit pick - The murder weapon in Shea's case was obviously a .45, they know that from the recovered slug. But how do they know the exact brand and model?

Not overly pertinent, but he obviously killed Trainor after he rubbed the affair in Beau's face. I'm assuming that Shea's murder three years later was because she had a new lover or lovers that she did in their bed?

This author's writing style is wonderful. Story line was a little weak, but the way it was presented makes up for it. His high rating record is sort of spotty, but I'll be glad to read more of his work with the hope I'll find some more jewels like this one.

Just to emphasize, the sentences and paragraphing are outstanding. Just enough side details to make it realistic without being boring. This is a skill very few authors here exhibit. More power to you!

"Not overly pertinent, but he obviously killed Trainor after he rubbed the affair in Beau's face. I'm assuming that Shea's murder three years later was because she had a new lover or lovers that she did in their bed?"

Yes, thought that was clear: he came home and found the fresh evidence in their bed.

Beau was looking the other way through all of this, but when people throw things into your face, you can't just pretend it isn't there, can't just look the other way. Beau could handle her getting some on the side, because he could no longer do things himself, but he couldn't handle being shown blatant disrespect.

In a country this big, there have to be a few men out there like Beau, robbed of their sexual abilities by some disease -- I could have used a paralyzing accident to explain things, but then Beau couldn't have made it living off the grid -- who do just look the other way while their wives have fun.

Compared to your last story it was like you did a 180, a good 180. I enjoyed this so much better. Now for my real comments. Never use numbers in your stories if you don't go back and reread them. if you used a editor, sham on them.

It was Thanksgiving Day of 1982, and Trainor had just sat down to dinner, holding court over his extended family, despite being only 42 himself,

March 22, 1985:

It was three years later that Shea Gibson turned up dead

It was 1987, and Gibson would have been 40 years old.

Hell, it was 2014 now, and the file on the Trainor murder had been open for 32 years now, while Shea Gibson was 39 years in her grave.

Yes these passages are take out of order to the story bur chronological by date.

the reason I pulled these is for just one part, 'while Shea Gibson was 39 years in her grave.' Shea would have been 29 years in the grave. To me the rest of the story was great but a FU like that from a seasoned writer is major.

I still gave you a four.

and different is really good! 5*

and a rare 5* for an LW story.

No one with a functioning mind can believe that the criminal law, whether here or elsewhere, necessarily correctly defines crime. Criminal law changes, often for the worse, and whether or not it's just depends entirely on its substance. Leaving this aside, this is an interesting tale well told. A clear "5". RR can be proud of this one.

Excellent story. Justice can be combined with compassion although the decision came after a incredibly long and difficult hunt. SF VET

The crime element makes this enjoyable to follow. The idea of a diabetic prisoner serving the rest of his life in jail at taxpayer expense makes no sense. He is for all intents and purposes confined to the hollow. The numbers did get distracting as I mathed my way through them. Could have easily been longer. Maybe even taken a trip to DeGarde.

That has long been a dream of mine.

There is a difference in justice or crime/punishment he was punished enough and I can relate to his point of view. Even to his resolve to let his wife get what she needed, though in the end the dumb b*tch didn't appreciate the gift he gave. (ain't that the way of most LW wives?) Cop was outstanding - never giving up. One of RR's best so far.

Nice detective tale but where does the erotica bit come in?

Wow! You , as the other guy said, did a 180 on this story. I've enjoyed most all of your writing, but this is a whole different level for me. You have shown that you can write anything. Amazingly, you burned a bastard, then the bitch, and yet put the betrayed spouse and revenge taker in a sympathetic light. Our protagonist, apparently a very good cop, chooses justice over the law. Murder is not the answer, but some people, as shown by Bo, just won't be disrespected. He tried to do the right thing by his wife, and she and a lover abused him. He got his self respect back the only way he felt he could.. Just an excellent story Reed, it goes straight into my favorites.

and unexpected from your usual stuff. 5 stars for this. it was well thought out, fleshed out and also it was detailed without being over or under done. nice tone and pacing. you should try this more often

2 people are dead because this man felt disrespected. He should have divorced his women as his life was over with his diabetes and his sex life was over. But murder is a capital crime.to take a life because your wife was screwing other men and was in need that you couldn't supply. Hogwash to the ending.

As much as seeing Pauline French show up in stories. Great story

Living alone and sick 30 years in the back woods and unable to move away is not much better than your own prison in the end.

No, they didn't.

The details of the investigation were tedious and boring. The plot was kind of, Cuckold got fed up. Which only begged the question, what took him so long. And why did the wife hang around if she was attractive and found him useless? From her reaction to being discovered it was obvious she had no respect or concern for him as her husband. And if one rich asshole found her worth risking his marriage for odds are she could have found a single rich fool to boost her life style. So it didn't really make any sense.

As far as Beau telling this Yankee from Boston anything, that ain't gonna happen.

So thanks for the effort, but I think you can do much better, and have done.

Well done, one of your best IMHO.

Well written, constructed and well paced and with a satisfying conclusion.

Really enjoyed this story. Thanks for sharing.

You crop what you sowed and live with the good or bad taste in da mouth.

Cinque estrellas.

Like the missed tag screwing the comments... great cms coding. 12 stars!

It must have been Type II(no insulin) but there is no justice, in disease that hits like this. I at least am guilty (in my mind) of drinking too much sugary drinks. But ṕersonally I disagree with the fact that adultery is not a crime and I thing that the threat of a few years in jail might strongly reduce the ease with which people commit this CRIMES!

. . . I did do a 180 on this story. Unpredictability is a good thing, right?

Some people saw this as justice, in that Mel Trainor and Shea Gibson were cheating and disrespectful, though neither of those is a crime. A few others saw it as injustice, because murder is a crime, a capital offense as one reader put it -- though not in Massachusetts, which abolished capital punishment in 1984 -- because two people were murdered. A story about a guy on death row, finally facing execution after 23 years in prison, musing about whether he was still glad that his cheating ex and her boyfriend were murdered, even though he's about to pay the price for it, might be an interesting one, though I don't know that I'd be the one to write it; HDK, perhaps?

A couple of people have complained that this wasn't erotic at all, but that's what a lot of LW stories have become; writers seem to have a lot of license here.

I can honestly say this has most likely happened in a few hollers here or there and if there wasn't any family around pushing the police that not many questions would be asked. I am sure its the same in other types of neighborhoods all across the USA. People just don't talk to the police in some places.

Seems like justice was served in my opinion

The main character, the investigating detective, mentions he turned 40 in 2000. That means he was born in 1960. He says he got his accounting degree in 1978. At age 18? Not likely. More likely, 1982.

Another error, about the difficulty in finding work in 1978. While inflation was high in the late 70's, high unemployment wasn't a factor, until 1981, the beginning of the Reagan presidency. The previous recession 1974-1975 was during the Ford administration. So with Carter, lower unemployment, than with Ford or Reagan, but higher inflation. Rated 3 stars.

Justice was served. He lead a pretty lousy life and the cheaters got wasted.

ReedRichards,

Thank you for this submission. I can usually tell when I come across a story that rises above the mediocre jerk-off material we see so much of on the site, not that I object to that if that what floats your boat. This was a skillfully developed plot with characters drawn as 3D people, yet with a minimum of useless waffling description. That level of perception translated through the creative process is fucking hard to achieve. But RR you nailed this tale and I am mighty glad you decided to share it with your readers. Cheers!

A fine tale from RR, one of the most enjoyable ones I've read so far, though, truth be told, I haven't made it through all of them yet, so I reserve the right to move something above it or below it in my personal rankings.

The question of justice is an interesting one, but I would think that since the people browsing this site are readers (at least in theory), that they might have come across differing forms of justice in their readings, each effective in its own way.

There's justice in its tangible form: the long arm of the law; of courts and cops, of prisons and penance.

Then there's the personal one: being trapped in a life that's not of your choosing, where the guilty's freedoms had are limited almost to the degree of being stuck in a cell somewhere.

While not written as a Gothic horror story, there's a sense of Edgar Allan Poe's justice here; a man pushed to commit crimes and seemingly get away with them. Yet in his escape, he is trapped just as surely as if he had been caught, tried and convicted. Here the taxpayer didn't have to fund his imprisonment. It's not like he went out to kill again... so would the "reform" of his imaginary prison be just as effective? Surely, yes.

But what of the real justice inflicted on Beau? It's not overtly stated here, but look deeper.

Beauregard's character was that of a good man, a loyal and patient man who was pushed too far by weaker people. If he was such a good man, then what would Beau's dreams be of? The look of his wife's face as she died in his arms? His shame at her infidelity? The guilt of having destroyed his own and Mel's families? The burdens of prison often give those convicted a sense of justification for their crimes - an exchange of time-served for the crime done. Beau had no such exchange, at least in the sense society marks justice with. No, his prison was more personal and just as real.

Seeing this as justice is the responsibility of the reader to give life to the characters and live in the story's world. Otherwise, what's the point of reading any fiction to begin with? If you can't see the depth here, you've wasted your time.

Shea and Mel did not break a statute or written law, but they broke the Golden Rule, to treat Beau as he would treat them. It's funny that readers don't see this - what is the code of Hammurabi of "An eye for an eye" other than a blunt codification of the Golden Rule? If you take an eye, be prepared to give one. Here, if you take what a man has to live for, be prepared to surrender your own. And in a real sense, modern justice is the same - commit a crime and you will be punished; justice served as an exchange of freedom.

I'm quite surprised at the readers who take "justice" only in the literal "Thou shalt not...", "penal code 23 section 42.1" forms. That's boring and narrow.

RR has given a very subtlely shaded piece where there is a real sense of justice done and of honor, and a certain degree of respect on both sides of the story. Beau's confession was probably the last piece he needed to escape from his own prison, which he sat in, alone, for longer than he would've sat in a Massachusetts cell had he been convicted.

Again, for the readers that don't get this, it's their loss.

An interesting perspective on justice. An honorable man, acting honorably, despite severely breaking some mighty big taboos.

Very good story. Not the usual Cajun setting, just a hint. It works, but I miss the first hand account, as the events unfolded. The detective’s viewpoint sucked all of the emotion out. I kind of wish it contained more of the detective’s life story wrapping his patient, plodding, casework.

Bit different,but still a good story.

A Good Read

This was a nice break from the ugly side that we often see in these CW stories.

Thank you RR.

If you couldn't perform for the wife you loved; could you get ahead of it and give her hall passes with the condition that you would kill her if she disrespected/left you? That's a pretty cold hardass proposition. Seems Beau was just that hardass. He was willing to let Shea steal a few passes..., until she dissed him.

Very good story- like watching a good detective show on the tube

Different & well done. 4 stars.

Bill S.

The detective could call the case closed. But could he really declare the guy dead. He’d lose his meager social security benefits.

An incredible story, I told you the old boy can write. I just wish he could put out something like this more often.

A well told and thoroughly interesting tale. Thanks for a really good read!

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Thank you to the previous commenter about President Carter. Too many imbeciles like the author erroneously blame him for the problems of the late 70’s, He was a much better president than he is given credit for and conservatives love to disrespect the great man.