by Void_Sprite
It could have been better if you had choosen some other words for commands. Hearing bitch repeatedly three times every sentence just sounded crude, and set a strange mood for the story.
You should deffinately consider doing more chapters and let everyone see how he uses his Power at home. and at work.
Sooo good! The other comments were right. This story has a lot of potential to be even bigger!
I loved the ending! That was great!
that this series has some serious potential, i hope you keep it up!!!
Keep it up; there's lots of possibilities for this power. You can even add antagonists, others with this power, or maybe women who aren't affected by this and make it their goal to tharwt him.