by MaryAnderson
As I read this well written, exciting, and well planned story, and compared it with your story on the son becoming the alpha male, just think how overwhelmingly exciting and strong it would be for a separate story with a girl like Katie who becomes he alpha daughter who dominates, and overwhelmingly pleases, both mom and dad as she coordinates all sexual activities of her parents as well as sharing them with her girlfriends, boyfriends, relatives, and other parents......!
This series was so hot, tender, intimate and loving. Loved every minute of it. Could have used some more all-family sex at the end, it kind of rushed for the finish line. But all-in-all it was outstanding. Great writing and vocabulary. A little bit more proofreading perhaps, but that was just small stuff. (I write some stuff, too, so maybe I'm a little too critical. Lush stories. I have to come here for the lusty incest stuff now.)
Again, kudos and keep on writing! Happy New Year.
Good series overall, but yeah, as I feared, chapter five did I number on my overall enjoyment. I simply wasn't able to reach the same levels of enjoyment I was able to with the first four chapters. You saved things a little bit, by making it clear that Lois' activities with the Principal, the Coach and Katie's teammates will include Ryan from now on, but for me this was too little too late.
Other will enjoy this series, I'm happy and will never say someone is wrong to simply enjoy something when they're not hurting anyone else in doing so, but this series turned into a big disappointment for me. :(
I read all 7 chapters in sequence. They were well written and very stimulating. Hope you write many more great stories.
This is must to be read very entertaining with plenty of twists and turns to the plots of all seven chapters keep up the good work and looking forward to many more like it.
You killed it in the last chapter and failed to fix anything in this 1 not only did you fail to take the dad out of picture you brought another man into it you like most apparently have no concept on how to write a decent story and keep it that way the time it took me to read the last 2 chapters is time I will never get back it was wasted
Really enjoyed the first 5 chapters but the last two weren't up to the same level in my opinion. Thanks and keep writing.