All Comments on 'Kevin's Special Delivery'

by Concubitus

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DruisiuilDruisiuilabout 2 years ago

Fun story, liked her narrative better but I think you needed both to make it complete

AnonymousAnonymousabout 2 years ago

POV changes are death to readability. Write third person if you want to expose the reader to other thoughts than those of a single character.

HayboysHayboysabout 2 years ago

You are a fanatic writer and I’m looking forward to reading many more of your fantastic stories please post more on here as soon as possible I can’t believe your story is so good for a first posting on this site have you been writing for other sites ?

Girglrebo53Girglrebo53about 2 years ago

Very well written. I like the way Lois tells her part of the adventure.

Mike9947Mike9947about 2 years ago

Great start - hope there’s more!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 2 years ago

I enjoyed the story from both sides and you matched them well. Your 2 characters have a long exciting journey ahead of them and I hope you share it with us

matureloverguy33matureloverguy33almost 2 years ago

This story was excellent! I can’t wait for more entries! Love the details.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 2 years ago

Very nice storry. REally hot!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 2 years ago

Wonderful story-telling, with great characters. However, the story seems to work best from the perspective of Lois rather than Kevin. Five stars.

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Older male with varied interests and fetishes. Enjoy reminiscing about my sexual past and speculating about my sexual future. My stories generally have their foundations in real life experiences. Also enjoy chat and sharing of stories and images.

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