All Comments on 'Kissing Leads To Cooties'

LMOL as usual. 5 stars.

Clever, quite original.

Enjoyable quick read.

Well done!

Not a Merry Christmas and nor a Happy New Year!

5

That was quite a pleasant diversion, thank you!

Funny. What there was of it. I do dislike unfinished faire.

Would take you ten years to guess that password.

Good ending to a wife willing to cheat in a home with her children there to observe and tattle.

Amusing little tale despite the misuse of Clause. It was suggestive of the (very) old Art Linkletter program entitled "Kids Say the Darndest Things."

It was an interesting way of revealing her affair via the kids. It's just a shame you didn't bother to finish the story.

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I see them getting divorced and him ending up with Kara, who'd be eager to twist the knife on her bitchy older sister.

Great way to discover is always the kids and using Santa was brilliant. Sounds like jana is history.

Finish the damn thing or quit writing!!

Hilarious!!

Scores 4/5

It sounds finished to me... I think he still has the same in-laws, just not the same cheating sister

Well done. D

You forgot to say how much coal Jared Klein got for Christmas.

Perfect

Very good, M&M! Loved it!

Sufficient. For some stories, it is just the Trick

Love it. Even the kids got in it this time.

That was that.

I always had this queasy feeling that the Jackson 5's version of Mommy Kissing Santa Claus was kinda had a creepy sexual innuendo in it especially when Michael's high pitch voice tried to convince others what he saw. Noah's revelation reminded me of that. Good riddance this time golf clubs are better than the wife. Yep, happily ever after...with the golf clubs. Ho ho hoe!

This was a fun romp. Well done and economically told. Solid 5 from me.

Brilliant as always! 5*

Blood for me. Thank you for the story.

Ahhhh .... Out of the mouths of babes ..... DOH!

*3. The title doesn't match the story, but understand the application of it to this story. "Out of the mouths of babies!" The rating would have been higher if there would have been some BTB details!!!!! Glad you mentioned a pre-nup! Hopefully, she was also precluded from primary custody of the kids!!!!

From the mouths of babes. Love it when some arrogant asshole gets what the richly deserve. Sad for it to ruin the kids Christmas, but still a good laugh.

This story, and the comments on it, point out the different expectations of readers. A short story is a snapshot in time, not a movie of someone's life. This story gave the reader exactly that. It was a snapshot. More than a few readers want to know that the cheater suffered greatly, the boyfriend was castrated and a bigger titted woman, who loved the kids, became the new mom. If you want that ending, mentally add it to every story you read, but for those of us with imaginations, this story works fine. Sometimes, less is more. Why must you read the same resolution in every story? What personal need does that fulfill? Nice job.

Excellent beginning and, I believe, a new discovery method. Can't wait to see what the Literotica writers do with the sequels, with your permission.

This is very near a 'February Sucks" potential, as it never ended, yet... But she is in deep kimchi... And since the pre-nup was mentioned we can all feel which way its leaning....

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Oh ya ""Out of the mouths of babies!" and in front of ALL the family, an aw-schmit moment - yikes....

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5*, Hooyah, Salutes....

It is fine for what it isn't. Jana obviously isn't the brightest bulb in the three pack.

No need to finish. it got 'Bloody''.

Rather intriguing storyline — captured attention. But characters one dimensional, not particularly humorous, and lacking any sense of erotica. Sadly, another BTB tale.

I rather liked the ending! Thanks for writing!

Clever as usual, M&M! Thank you! Please keep them coming

Children will give it all up. Too short for how good it was.

Dont let the whiners get you. The story was fine as was.

The misogynists can just imagine him smacking her around, and the little dicked boys can imagine him beating Jared into a bloody mess.

See thats why God gave people imaginations.

Too short

Liked it. The IT guy thing at the end was funny.

@regguy69…..no kid’s Christmas was ruined. It’s a story. You know, made up.

And seriously? Regguy 69? What are you, 13?

I think Jared Klein got the better end of the deal. Lame assed golf clubs or pussy? Pussy every time.

Like a lot of other commentators, I felt incomplete at the end. However, unlike most of those other commentators, I think that's more me than the story itself, or how it was written. I do agree that the "IT guys" password code cracking mastery in the epilogue was a bit much, though I'm sure it was meant to be a joke. And as to those who mentioned sequel possibilities, Powersworder has first dibs with the Kara suggestion. Though it'd probably be better if it turns out that Kara did much the same as Jana, hence her divorce. Then and only then can he land with someone worthy. Nice about the pre-nup. Bet that Jana will try to break it.

solid 4

It's an amusing story that is a vignette. And a 5* one at that.

"But it's short!" Yeah, that's what vignettes are, a short, brief account of an incident. Otherwise known as a flash story.

I also don’t like “unfinsed” stories. This finished story was just fine though.

Nope. These unfinished stories just aren't for me.

Excellent!

holding any comments need chapter 2

Smooth as Tennessee Whiskey!

Smooth as Tennessee Whiskey!Thanks!

Best "unfinished" story I've ever read. Well done.

What was that great show from the 50's? Kids say the darndest things.

Alright I give. If FTDS wasn't serving time for copywrite violations I'd ask her to do what I chose not to do. Anyone so inclined is invited to add a chapter. Happy New Year!!

Moreandmore, this is an excellent piece as is. Sometimes less is more.

This was original, cleverly constructed and well delivered. It picquet the readers imagination allowing for all sorts of scenarios to run rampant with numerous outcomes.

Thanks for letting this piece stand on it’s own.

Love these little short zingers. *****

Yeah, we definitely need a Chapter 2. I want the minutiae of the divorce proceedings, and to follow the characters' paths all the way to the grave. It should make the ending of Return of the King feel rushed in comparison.

Ah, just kidding. That was a fun apple beer.

Good story. This shows that sometimes the short ones can be just as good as the longer ones.

Hopefully someone else will finish it as it’s quite a good story. Shame FTDS retired,

Yes... well thought out, plotted and written.

Should there be a part two?... I don't know. Could there be a part two?... I wish so. Just to check if what the author describes was close to what my twisted mind came to.

A short one, with marked dialogues, including the small characters (age), and with the acidity of the two sisters-in-law, seizing the moment to receive their pound of meat, due to Jana's arrogance.

The end was just the beginning.

I usually offer 3 stars, the work of writing should always be recognized and rewarded. In this one I will propose 4 stars. It was a Christmas tale, but without the softening heart that was seen in the works of other authors this year.

Moreandmore, kind of made it apparent that Jana was history:

"I returned the golf clubs and picked out ones which wouldn't remind me of Jana.", but each reader will be able to think of his particular ending.

Others may ask the author to allow some addition or submission, let's see what happens...

But that's just my opinion.

A very nice SHORT story. Neither more scenes, nor more details would improve this fun romp. The PW code trick was the cherry on the sundae.

Keep 'em comin'.

IT folks (guys & gals) on LW *are* that gifted. Loved it!!

What happened to Santa's HO,HO,HO? Hope he got the kids and HO's sister...

Enjoy the story, but would like to see it a little longer. Thanks for writing.

Remember Art Linkletter wit his skit: Kids say the darndest things!! Good one mr author.

The password bit in the epilogue was the cherry on top. Thanks for sharing.

Out of the mouth of babes. It is true that some parents, especially the stay-at-home ones, forget that the kids see everything. Good story.

Great short! Holiday gatherings are the worst!

Even if it was unfinished I enjoyed the story 5✨s from me

Fun read.

good one!

Pretty funny, although too abbreviated. Four stars from me.

JPB

out of the mouths of children , well done good story