All Comments on 'Lamia Ch. 07'

Great story, love the bit about writing the stories we want to see. I found your writing by accident a few years ago, but it's always been poignant and interesting. This was a good story, and that was a sweet ending.

That was a great story. Thank you for sharing your work

Much improved ending from the last chapter, thanks! Great story. 5/5

Malthus. Huxley. And now Yuval Harari and the demons who gather at Davos. There's a trajectory of sorts, and this story with its omnicidal AI is definitely on it, well done.

My one piece of criticism is that Stephen is much too unperturbed by the ease with which he betrayed Christine. The scene where he brings her back to the store for the first time was much more poignant, and I believe that you have made Love too central to not only the thematic, but also to the unfolding of events, for it not feature more strongly at the close of Lamia's last chapter.

“My one piece of criticism is that Stephen is much too unperturbed by the ease with which he betrayed Christine.”

I struggled a bit with the tone there. Ultimately, I thought that dealing with Sara put Stephen sufficiently off balance that he didn’t really get the chance to drop into despair and self-recrimination. I might have missed the chance for a harder emotional beat. Something to look at in a future edit for sure.

thank you so much for sharing your talents with us, for me this was more than worth the wait. happy holidays 💕

Such a captivating story. I definitely came looking for a nonhuman lamia story, but walked away hours later with a well-written page-turner finished. Kudos, author!