All Comments on 'Lasting Love'

really good story will you write another chapter i do hope so it would be nice to see the relationship develop i cant get over the fact this is your first story it is so well written

I honestly don't see what you don't like about your writing. It's grammatically correct and it's realistic. Some of the stories on here are so "out there" but this really isn't. I'd love to read more, so please continue. :)

It was well written and I hope you write a second chapter. It was a nice pace to it, not to quick and it was realistic. I believe this could happen in real life.

I don't know what you were concerned about, as this is a 5 star story for sure.

Believable, sensual, and had a great pace to it.

Look forward to reading more.

I completely agree with the previous comments. 5 stars for sure! And you definitely need to write more. :) ~ L

dont know why you were worried , its a great story , loved it .. can't wait for you to write more and hopefully continue with this story ..

i thought it was very well written and very cute, most of the stories i have read on here just just right into it and thats all, but you lead up to the love making and it made me feel like it acutally happened. i also hope you write more to this, its a wonderful story and i cant wait to read how there love develops and the hardships that they go through with ashley being a teacher, and lily being her student.

I'm with everyone else. What I love about this story is the pacing and how you've set everything up. I LOVED the part in the beginning where Lily hears the bell ring and then all of the sudden Ashley says she's off her lunch break. I was like, "ooo, the plot thickens!" lol. :) This story reads like a multi-chapter story. I care about the characters and what's going to happen to them (which is so much more than can be said for many of the stories on here). And the sex scene was great! It wasn't, like, you know, super wild or "hot", or whatever you can call the other stories on here where they kind of just jump right into crazy sex right away. It was sensual and full of caring and feelings and all that jazz. I really liked how you switched between Lily and Ashley's POV throughout. It's nice to get into both of their heads during this pivotal time. :) Okay, I'm going to shut up now. This is/was really great, and I very much hope you continue with this story! :D

Looking forward to more on Lily and Ashley's trysts. Keep it going you are doing great.

continue

2 have that come true or the lady at my bank whose a total milf older women r so hot keep doin ya thing miss

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I Hope There Is A Follow Up Part 2

continue with this?!

Please say there will be more from these two!!!

I think that there should be a second and maybe a third part to this story...

For a first effort, this was pretty good. Okay, there were a few minor grammatical errors here and there but nothing for you to worry about. Given time and plenty of practice, I think you'll turn into a very decent writer. I've given you five stars to encourage you.