All Comments on 'Lauren and Alison'

nice one :) good try

Literotica has a volunteer editor program - please use it! The premise is interesting, as are your characters. It's difficult to enjoy or even understand the story in parts because of poor grammar. You will be a stronger writer if you work with an editor. Keep writing!

It could be improved by some fairly simple proofreading. Some of these things can be a challenge for authors to spot since they know what should be there.

Not sure why everyone is acting your minor grammatical errors are so distracting. I didn't even notice them. Really enjoyed this story. Great job.

I hate to admit it but proof reading was never really one of my strengths, plus I wrote a lot of this story in pieces on my mobile. I apologise for any mistakes I may have made, but I promise the next piece I upload will be a bit more well written and well planned. But thank you for the criticisms, advice and praise :)

Hey, it is awesome! I hope you will write more!

A love story is blossoming