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Maybe it's just me, but the overuse of the "air quotes" is a little annoying.

and take your "crouch" to the doctor, bozo.

This *isn't* a SciFi or Fantasy story (even though the word magic is used *once*). And "PLEASE" avoid switching between first and third person within a sentence - something like 'I stroked his cock' feels decidedly gay. A proofreader or an editor might help a lot here!

THIS IS UNFINISHED,,,,,

This is just plain crap and as exciting as jello.

When you've decided which language you are writing in, stick with it. English is possibly your best bet.

Seriously, you have stopped writing at a totally inapproprite place. You have far too many spelling mistakes and grammatical errors which spoils the flow of the story. Get a proof reader or, better still, an editor for your next few submissions and your rewards will be great.

Probably the most painful story series I have ever read. Obviously, you chose not to use a proofreader.