All Comments on 'Le Français Pt. 01'

Excellent build up!

Very interesting start.

This is certainly promising. I'm definitely looking forward to it's continuation

Lots of potential with this introduction. I look forward to seeing where this tale takes us.

Excellent introduction. I do enjoy your writing

very much fun to read, Thanks.

Bien sûr, continuez cette histoire avec toute la rapidité requise !

Holy smokes, I'm not sure who commissioned you on this, but consider me eagerly awaiting the next chapter. Love it all so far, great introductions, wouldn't change a thing.

Sometimes, even the best authors swing and totally miss ;P

Seems to be the case here. I'll be skipping this series entirely.

Wonderful story and terrific start to a series I am looking forward to!

Now that is a great start and an excellent cliffhanger. Going to be interesting for Snead going forward methinks.

This is interesting so far, outside your usual genre.

Can't wait to read chapter 2

What a fascinating beginning. This is a mature, complicated web you have begun to weave and a pure joy to read.

Fantastic start. Turn it into a movie script!!!!! Consider Felicity is involved somehow, but blackmailed, or has a client that's involved. That will rock Marc's world and lead to character development possibilities. Also, if you've not head of it, look up the old Jonny Dollar Radio show. It may give you some interesting ideas.

https://_www.youtube_.com/_watch?v=_2SO1CpJEV6o (remove_)

If you're not familiar with movie scripts, look up "Save the Cat." The book and just about everything you need to start are on-line.

Love the 1st installment. A thought about the dialogue between Julia and Sinead. It seems stilted and not what one would expect from two women who've been working together for awhile. Sinead lying to her partner about how she "followed" the money also seems an ill-fit for her character. I would have her tell Julia that she worked on it in her spare time, with some helpful advice. This would have let Julia know what had happened, while not exposing her partner to direct knowledge of potential wrong-doing. This would also have enabled Julia to respond with something along the lines of "watch out for free advice, it can have a high price" or ", it can lead you astray..." and add more layers to both characters.

It feels a bit...hammy, perhaps? Or a bit over-reliant on tropes. Marc in particular is very one-note. But I know you write very well and are capable of great character development, so I'm confident you'll find your footing with this story too.

Very interesting as always! I look forward to further character development as we learn more about the mysterious Le Francais.