All Comments on 'Lessons Learned Ch. 02: The Plan'

As an aspiring writer, I wonder why this is in Exhibitionists rather than Erotic Couplings. Simply because more people read that?

Very well written come of age story. Please keep up the good work.

I agree with "IslandChef52"'s Comment: this is a good story, which I also hope to see continued soon.

(I wish to add, though, that as I read it, it isn't only Zach (the male protagonist) who is "learn"ing (or "com[ing]" of age), but (as I read it) Brinna (the nominal "teacher" -- and female protagonist) is learning things about herself, as well.)

As "IslandChef52" said, "Please keep up the good work."

E. (in New York City; known on this site as "nycreader").

Oh dear lord, please write more. A lot more. Soon. Please.

Why is it that women are so much better at erotica? Others may disagree but, for me it is that the most important thing in a sexual relationship is that it should be great for my partner. Don't get me wrong, I wanrt to enjoy it but that enjoyment is driven by knowing I am getting it right, so brilliant descriptions of a woman's own pleasure are far more erotic than a man's less subtle and often clumsy description of the pleasures he thinks he is giving. Those descriptions are just one of the things you do sooo well.

All of this in only two instalments - it bodes very well for future instalments as the mutual education progresses. You have a very real talent.

Jim

You have the ability to carry the reader into the room, to be the voyeur and watch Brinna and Zach. It is a wonderful skill you have.

Tomorrow, chapter 3 for sure.

A graphic verbal picture for one's mind! Hard!

Another excellent chapter completed, and you have left me (11) to go on to; I am SSOO looking forward to these next ones, to see more of you beautiful execution of writing, and your imagination.

Not to be a 'copy-cat'...I have to agree with the other comments about a woman writing erotica; you have the 'touch' that men just seem to miss out on in their tales. Kinda like in the girl-on-girl stories, a woman's touch is so much more sensual, even if they know men who please them. (Not trying to be offensive here, is an observation from other stories, and from talking to women who have enjoyed another woman...)

Zach is an apt student; I see emotional connection coming, maybe more than intended, right? Still, if it goes there, so much the better...AND, Zach's confidence will be boosted into outer space!

Another Five**5**Star story!!

Good premise continues.

Well told.

Five stars.