All Comments on 'Let's Get Out of Here'

this is nothing but a first draft that never should have been posted it needs a good editing do us all a favor and delete it and run it through a good editor then repost it.

SHOW SOME PRIDE IN YOUR WORK AND A LOT OF RESPECT FOR THE READERS AND ALWAYS USE A GOOD EDITOR BEFORE POSTING.

This is a wonderfull start to your story. I hope that you dont just stop it here. Its a prefect beginning.

Not sure if this is your first story, but here's a hint: At the end of the story (chapter), tell us if, it's the end or say "to be continued" or whatever.

I'll hold off voting and check back.

If a girl is 5'5" and 115 pounds, doubtful she'd have 36C's and a round plump butt. Find a 5'5" girl and see for yourself. It would be a pleaseant chenge to have some reality in these stories, since not all woman have huge breasts and very few men have 8"'s.

it was a first/ rough draft and i realized that i forgot to add in that it was a work in progress.. and to the person who thinks that it is not realistic, the girl mentioned in the story is actually based off of someone that i know.

"But once they hit puberty.........". What does this sentence (or should it have been TWO sentences?) mean?

I hope the author reads my feedback.

As this was a draft story, not ready for publication, I will delay my vote until a re-write is posted.

do yourself and all readers a favor and delete this story and run it through a good editor then repost it. NEVER EVER post a first draft EVER AGAIN always run your stories through a good editor then post them. SHOW SOME PRIDE IN YOUR WORK AND A LOT OF RESPECT FOR THE READERS AND ALWAYS USE A GOOD EDITOR BEFORE POSTING. if you are writing for yourself that is fine but don't post it if you are writing for the readers then make sure it is done right or don't do it at all.