All Comments on 'Let's Pretend'

WOW--please keep this coming.

Every paragraph was one single sentence. This made for very awkward phrasing and reduced the story's readability. Too bad because the story itself has a lot of merit.

I am SOOOOO wet from this story

This series is sooo hot! Great work!

Hurry with more!

way too hot !!

If I could vote 175% to offset the dribble of the reader who said "It could be better", I would. Who cares about one sentence paragraphs. The reader needs to learn about good style and how that locks you in to the passion of what you are reading without giving a second thought as to how its written. And to make such a damning statement anonymously is cowardly. Well done mischievous1! A very hot story, and for me, written with style!

Mark was laying on his back naked, his cock completely hard. I positioned his camera toward his bed and turned it on. Then I crawled over him, my hanging breasts nearly touching his chest, as I grabbed Mark's cock bringing it into position below my we pussy. I gently slid down my son's hard shaft until he was completely inside me. I quietly rubbed my clit against his pelvis, I wasn't moving much, it was more of a slow grind as I gyrated on his cock. Mark's cock felt great, he filled me so completely. As I increased my speed, I couldn't help an occasional whimper escaping my lips in my pleasure. My breathing became more labored as I began moving up, and down, with increasing pressure. Mark would let out a groan now, and again. "He must have been having a great dream," I giggled to myself. I started to bounce more, becoming lost my desire to reach my orgasm. Without realizing it, I had begun moaning unconsciously as I rode my son's cock. He was so hard, it was the best cock I'd had inside of me until that moment. As I worked his cock inside me, I looked down at Mark's face. His eyes were glued to my bouncing tits as I began to pound on his cock harder. I felt Mark's hands begin to fondle my breasts as I started to buck up, and down on him, my moans becoming constant now. Suddenly a powerful orgasm his me like a storm and I started coming hard. "Oh god Mark, oh god honey, you feel so good!" Oh, oh, oh honey, I'm going to cum!" "Oh yes, oh yes, ah, ah, ah, ah, oh, oh, aaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhh!!!