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Dear Master Sato,

I am not one to whom you have addressed this missive, being someone who has not engaged editors other than occasions where the reviewers are refusing to publish my smut for reasons that , other than due to a complete lack of reading comprehension, baffle me. I also have authority issues, so if I were to engage such a professional as yourself, it would probably be only for the profound pleasure of deciding you're wrong about everything and doing just as I wanted in the first place.

Be that as it may, I find this to be a fine piece of ironic erotic literature! The combination of grammar analysis, when applied to snippets of erotica out of context, tickles me with its perversity and strangeness. Bravo!

Here's my take on the rock-paper-scissors of "come," "cum," and "orgasm" - ready?

Come: I like using this one in place of the verb "orgasm." It is not too crude and I tend toward the character-driven romantic, funny stuff. But, like you said (see what I did there?), context is important.

Cum: This one I like to use for the noun/product of "orgasm." Male, or female, this one screams "sticky fluid of happiness" to me.

Orgasm: This word... I don't know. I see this word, and my brain says "organ," which could be evocative, but I grew up in old churches, so it ends up with the wrong imagery. My brain also says "organism" and "gas," neither of which you want to be thinking about when climbing to the heights of erotic satisfaction. Well, maybe you do, I don't want to assume. There's a lot of different-flavored erotica out there and I don't want to judge.

Other options I've seen: "spent" (vaguely evocative of fatigue or a monetary transaction), "flower" (exclusively used in the female sense, but imagining it in the male sense makes me giggle, so I do it for a laugh sometimes), "climax" (totally don't imagine myself doing this in the air-conditioned IMAX theaters), "squirt" (don't think of the soda, don't think of the soda, don't think--), "peak" (also contextually difficult: "She peeked and thought he looked rather peaked after he peaked, disappointing her hopes for round two.")

So, those are my thoughts. Edit them as you will.

Thank you for raising this important issue!

LingeringAfterthought

Dear Master Sato.

My main language is UK English.

I would strongly defend your use of the words 'but', 'and' and 'because' as per your example above. It is quite legitimate to use these words at the beginning of a sentence in the context of re-inforcing or contrasting what went immediately before. What drives me to distraction however, is the current trend in the UK to begin sentences with the word 'so'. It frequently crops up in News stories. Example "So, currently there are 3000 cases of Covid per day but we hope to see a gradual reduction by next week." The word 'so' is redundant in this instance. The use of 'but' at the beginning of a sentence could be used in that example where, by continuing, the interviewee might add; 'But we are also aware of factors outwith our control'. It would be grammatically clumsy to use two 'buts' in the same sentence. Similarly another response could be 'Because there are facors outwith our control, we remain vigilant.' The use of 'because' to begin that sentence would be allowable.

There is a part of the film "Finding Forrester" where the main charcter, Jamal Wallace, explains the modern way of using words as you have exampled. Okay, it is only a film but like it or not the truth of that scene is inescapable.

Ok! So ... It looks like you are attuned to non-USA English and are on the formalized side of writing according to the tone I am detecting in your missive. Okay, so ... that's alright - totally acceptable approach to editing. But, if I send a story and you decide to edit it - would it be American English - as that is my native language?

You remarked, "It will be difficult, as after three consecutive years of Grade 12 English will attest to, my teachers bore into us that this was a practice that should not be practised." This line was a bit jarring for me to comprehend. Do you spend three years in Grade 12 English class - in that you needed those three repetitions to master it? ;-)

My stories could benefit by having an editor, according to at least two comments on my published work at Literotica.com. I just found another one or two errors in my humor/satire published story 'Life is Like Shit - Not Chocolate.' I must have combed that document dozens of times - well at least a baker's dozen - before I submitted it. Yet, there they are! It would seem I could benefit by some 'practise' with an editor before submissions.

I've never worked with anyone on editing my work. My writings are relaxed in tenor and style. But, I'm willing to give it a try. You might have a look at one of my shorter writings and see if my style and subject matter would be a good fit for your editing skills.

[Did I get enough of those ok, OK, Okay, but, and So in my document to tease you?]

As for: cum or come - That's a writer's call. I believe, as long as they are consistent, that shouldn't be an editor's area of consideration. It is in that phonetic/ linguistic category of po-ta-to and PO-tah-toe or which end of an egg should be cracked.

Thank you, for your recent editing services. I appreciate your keen eye for details. I missed far more than I thought you could have found. Your work improved the presentation very well. The article is pending approval with Laurel as I write this.

I will definitely ask for your editing on my next story!

Thanks, Kenjisato!

Well written. I like to use 'come' as an alternative word for orgasm, and use 'cum' as an alternative word for sperm or ejaculation. So when I am writing my stories, as an example, if my character is about to orgasm, I will write it out as "I am going to come," or "I'm coming."

The word cum will only exist if it is necessary in describing the physical evidence of ejaculation. "A drip of cum on the tip of his cock" or "my chest was sprayed with his thick ropes of cum."

I hope this helps!

Kenji I have had the pleasure of witnessing your great editing skills firsthand. Your attention to detail has definitely helped in my stories. Presently I’m working on getting them on Literotica.

Hopefully soon, I’ll be sending you something new that I’ve written.

Thanks for what you do my friend.

Mr_Brady 😉👍

I use 'cum' as a verb as well.

I owe everything to Kenji, he maded me better!