All Comments on 'Life and Love in the Army Ch. 04'

Boring, is he even worried about HIS kids? Doesn't seem like it, how long has it been since she took off with them and only at the end of this chapter he cries about it? why bother rushing to get this out when there won't be more for months. The time between posts breaks the flow of a story and lets face it how many of us are going to go back and reread so we remember whats happened, or in this case that basically nothing happened.

It seems to be working. This might have been better as a novel/novella, but that is a big undertaking. I refute the above with this: you are keeping it simple, so there isn't a lot to remember. A plot with thirty characters is a lot harder to track.

Your characters are well enough drawn that I know know that there be more than just written porn here.

This is a nice story.. a nice build up of characters and events.. keep it coming!!

Not at all surprised Pam left. Lenore need to do the right thing for now and just be a friend to Joe. He need to be focused on finding out where Pam went and getting a lawyer.