All Comments on 'Life of Paul: Rendezvous: Alina'

Awesome work! I love how you flesh out the story and characters even though we all know they’re horny and make the story and setting interesting

Liked it. It could use some careful editing. "Consciousness" is not spelled "conscienceless", to give one example.

While editing is needed for this story, the errors in grammar are not such as to be distracting. Characters are well-developed in the story, and the plot intermingled with love scenes holds the attention of the reader very well. However, it is best to read the previous chapters before reading this one.

Thank you for the feed back so far. Editing is always a challenge when you are self-editing, which is why there are editors I suppose.

If I could go back and re-submit stories, I would put them in a more chapter-like order, so apologies for those who think the story is disconnected in places.

Please, keep the comments coming.