All Comments on 'Life's Not A Porn Movie Ch. 01'

Life's Not A Porn Movie and this is not a porn story.

Don't worry about what this person said ⬆. Just please keep the chapters coming!

Flow is choppy and sporadic. Could not follow storyline and lost interest in reading it.

There's some truth in comments concerning flow of the story.

Get an editor ASAP and you'll improve quality and be rated with the best.

Look I know you have some negative comments but don't be discouraged. This was a very good story. I read a ton of these and yours is one of the best. Your imagery is top notch. I do not know anything about flow and such but I very much enjoyed your story. Now I can't wait for him to fuck his sister in (hopefully) the next chapter!

Your story was very well written, arousing and is worth reading more of ! In your next chapter, I think Chrissy needs to be visited by her brother tonight almost nude and cuddle with his sister and do what he did to Mary with her. She did the whole thing on purpose and to try to break down the wall between them .... I'll bet, his sister would be very hot in bed because its her brother screwing her !! Thanks ...

Please write the next chapter ASAP must read more

Very good story and well written/translated. Couldn't tell English wasn't your first tongue from the read. Very good. Hope the next 4 read just as well.

I wouldn't have known English wasn't your first language if you hadn't mentioned it. You've done better than a lot of people whose first language (presumably) IS English. Please continue.

Why do 'authors' here always make them pull out?

It's a fucking fantasy, fill her with cum and enjoy it. You can't get a disease from a story, no one is getting pregnant from a story, just cum inside her ffs.

Other than that, I enjoyed this story greatly, sadly didn't make me cum as pulling out ruins the whole illusion.

great start cant wait for the next chapters.

Its a bit strange shooting your load on a girls ass when wearing a condom, second, there aint no buses on Christmas day !!