All Comments on 'Liking Paula'

Good premise.

But sex is rushed -- when it happens. Needed to slow down. Needed more dialog while they're doing sexual things to/with each other. Dialog about what they're doing. Dialog about how it fees to her. And to him.

Instead of him being so adept at eating pussy, better if he were a bit leery about it at first. And if hed needed some instruction/direction to do what she wanted. Before his mouth got to her pussy, did he like the way she smelled? She could have fingered herself and then have him taste her fingers. Did he like the taste? Woild he like to tast it at the source?

Three stars.

Fair point, Mr. Anonymous. I'll take that on board when I write my second story.

Great Love Story well written Five Stars RW

An exceptionally good first effort. I hope to see more of your work soon.

Very well presented.